Movies and television have negative effects on young people.
One's opinion has the power to shift the paradigm of society. When ten percent of the population holds an unshakable belief, people's belief will be adopted by the majority of the community. Evidently, people need only one person to change the group of ten, and the ten will begin to change the entire modus of operation for hundreds to shift. The agreement I choose to make for the topic movies and television have negative effects on young people can also change the paradigm. Therefore, I will provide two reasons to prove the power to change other's opinion with right reasons. First, watching movies and television takes long time away from young people. Second, a lot of violent images are embedded in movies and television.
To begin with, watching movies and television is not good for young people because it requires long time to them. Spending long time on watching those medias makes young people spend less time on their studies. When they use less time for studying, they will be less likely to be successful, which is an negative effect. For example, a friend of mine lived in front of the television at his home when he was a university student. He watched only television all the time instead of working on study. As a result, his achievement in academic course was so terrible that he knew nothing about his major even after the semester.
In addition, movies and television have bad influences on young people because they are full of violent images. When young people were exposed to violent images many times, they will be easily aggressive and violent. Because watching those moving images affects young people to be hot-tempered, it has negative effects. For example, I met a pure boy when I was a young kid. Oneday, he got into some violent movie clips. He loved those clips so much that he tried to do the actors as they did. A few years later after then, I heard his news from another friend. It was that he was arrested of crucial crimes.
Opinions are the medium between the knowledge and the ignorance. In such a case, man must struggle to win a tug-of-war with power to change opinions into the reality. I have written
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: One's
Ones opinion has the power to shift the para...
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Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... less likely to be successful, which is an negative effect. For example, a friend ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73138297872 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41506788902 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523936170213 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.3811662939 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.125 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6666666667 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08333333333 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283735546104 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823251879331 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109183953673 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158819816951 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776917840681 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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