A Nation Should Require All Of Its Students To Study The Same National Curriculum
From my perspective, I think it should depend on the circumstance of different countries.
Firstly, if you live in a developing country, maybe students learn the same curriculum is better. For the government will invest more money in some other industries, like agriculture and manufacture, which would get rapid revenue. As we all know, the government cannot benefit from education in a short period, so they will not invest it too much. There is another point that teachers in developing countries are fewer than developed countries. In order to teach more students, schools will hire some people with less teaching experience. To teacher the same curriculum is easier for them since they will have more materials for them to prepare. If they teach a specific course, the quality of it cannot be ensured.
Secondly, if you live in a developed country, to teach various courses may a better choice. Since in developed countries, there are many more education opportunities for every students. People will not worry about their occupations, for everyone can find a job, even though they do not matriculated by any college. So, they can learn something which they really love, but not which they can make more money. Thus, teachers impart them different knowledge will give them disparate views. Nevertheless, a developing country's student have to face the college entrance examination. If they fail it, they have to review the knowledge of high school and take this exam next year. To some extent, it is the only path to change their live, given that employers will only hire students who graduate from famous universities.
Thirdly, if you live in a country with many ethnicities, to learn their own culture is crucial. They must save their own culture and inherit it. They are the best spokesman of their culture. Since we know that diveristy will inspire some innovative ideas, we can learn from each others and understand the difference.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 321.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07788161994 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7163251244 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570093457944 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.2805992513 60.3974514979 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.5 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.05 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0712113583195 0.243740707755 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0245036813771 0.0831039109588 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376928312427 0.0758088955206 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0465706979105 0.150359130593 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225266777894 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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