A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position

Due to the development of the society, there is a more complicated criteria for students today.There are more and more people with different kinds of skills what a nation required. While it is unsuitable for them to school with a same national curriculum, which I totally disagree.A same nation curriculum could shape students' thought even inhibit certain talents of them. Moreover, there will be no necessary for college to set various kinds of courses as the students cannot choose or adopt to them. I will adress my view in three points.

Firstly, the requiration of students for studying same national curriculum will infulence students in mind.Students, before they going to college, have the best chance to stimulate their thoughts and talents.It's a good idea for a students who exlcellent at math to study olympic math cousres, on the other hand, it would be a nightmare for a talent who gifted at writing.Maybe in the future,the nation will win olympice math games with that math kid while suffer a lost in Nobel Prize in literature.It is necessary for students to have their own classes selectively, so that all the students could develop what they are good at.So do not let an athelte runner to study in the classroom, the track field is his/her stage.

Secondly,when students who go to college with all the same nation curriculums, they will find it would be difficlut to select major because they seemly would be suitable for everyclass or would not, which they could not tell by themselves.This is the sequela, what I disscused before, of the infulence which could inhibit students' thought.So there could be no more necessary for universities to take lots of different classes.

Thirdly, In the future, the nation will lose power to compete with other countries as the people gradutates from colleges with the same thoughts. People would not consider problems in other ways. Fors example, decads ago, the NASA want to invent a kind of pen could be using forever in the space, and even they advertise on Media to find the guy who can make the pen, nobody figured out until a little kid asked:" why not try pencil?" This is advice satisfied all the need of NASA and gave a shock all over the country.If we use the same way to think we will be the people who cannot figure out the pencil.So it is a nighmare for sudents to have the same curriculum.

In conclusion, I belive it is unnecessary for students to study the same curriculm nationwide, it will inhibit the future of the country.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, in conclusion, kind of, of course, all the same, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86511627907 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76715261338 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 23.0359550562 187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 209.144543319 60.3974514979 346% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 209.2 118.986275619 176% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.0 23.4991977007 183% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.6 5.21951772744 280% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 7.80617977528 243% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268750260721 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104726053063 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775018308952 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158371759584 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423414211875 0.0667264976115 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.0 14.1392134831 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.29 48.8420337079 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 12.1743820225 155% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 11.2143820225 171% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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