A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Prima facie, national curriculum has many merits. It would be especially advantageous if every student in a country had some shared national identities upon graduation from high school. Some of the proponent of uniform curriculum may say that there is the least amount of knowledge for high school graduates such as democratic attitude, critical reasoning and so on. I do agree with the existence of such knowledge. What I disagree with them is not that we need national curriculum in some degree, but that all we need is such a stiffened education. The recommendation above that all the students in a country should study the same educational material until college days is too strong to hold true.
Supporter of national curriculum may argue that there are many things for high school graduates to know as civil of the country. Consider democratic attitude. No matter how a student goes to college or not, he or she must learn about how to respect other people’s opinion and how to respond when their civil rights are encroached. Also, all the students must study critical reasoning in their high school days. They should have not just literacy, but ability to contemplate on what they read. I fully agree that these sorts of materials should be in national curriculum for all the students in the country.
True, these kinds of learning are crucial and indispensable materials. However, there are many other subjects about which some student need not to learn, though they are crucial for some other students. Consider advanced mathematics courses including calculus. For those who are interested in college-level mathematics, physics and engineering, it should be included in their high school course work. But there are many other students who are not interested in those fields. Consider students who want to major English literary. Although we grant that advanced math course might help for them, there are no reason to make math courses mandatory for them. In the same vein, for those who do not want to go college, necessitating such abstract courses is undesired. This is because many of them feel frustrated when they meet advanced math which are above their ability and away from their interests, which makes their willingness to study new things deteriorated.
Also, there is another very important reason for needs of variance of education: diversity. Students in a country are not living in similar regions and not in uniform culture. Students should learn their regional and cultural characteristics. Consider Native Americans. While their children should learn about what their nationality is, how democratic system works, and how to be critical to what they are reading, they should also learn about their ethnicity and culture. Without this kind of conservative education, their identities would not survive long, which endanger our society’s cultural diversity.
I concede the statement to the extent that there are some crucial materials as a national curriculum. But there are also things that are necessary only for some students, but not every student. Also, standardized curriculum could harm our cultural diversity. In these respects, I do not agree with the speaker’s assertion that only the same national curriculum must be given upon college graduation.
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...jects about which some student need not to learn, though they are crucial for some other...
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...ust be given upon college graduation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, while, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2784.0 2235.4752809 125% => OK
No of words: 529.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26275992439 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80366713135 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446124763705 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 865.8 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.1570537791 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8064516129 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.064516129 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.8064516129 5.21951772744 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268701320561 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713829325974 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520519163747 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163664582653 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404632158331 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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