A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Though studying the same coursework before college may put many students on an equal playing field as that of their other peers, it is inadvisable to have them study the same coursework given that they know what lines of work they would like to pursue in the future. A number of factors play a role into why students should be allowed to have a choice as to what they would like to study prior to entering university.
For one thing, many students may already have a career in mind prior to entering college. To force a student to study a topic that has no bearing on their career desires would be to limit them from opportunities to choose classes that could benefit them and give them bonus knowledge that could aid them in their future jobs. For example, if a student wishes to enter the medical profession, a class such as art would not benefit them for their future goals as much as a course on emergency aid. As such it is important for students to be able to pick and choose which classes would be of most benefit to them so that they can maximize their learning and thus become more equipped to provide better work down the line when they become professionals in the career of their choice.
Furthermore, allowing students to choose their pre college coursework would also act as a financial benefit for these students. If allowed to choose their coursework in high school, many students could potentially get Advanced Placement Credits and not have to pay extra money in college to take them if they were able to do so in high school. Say there is a high school student who has the desire to study music. Rather than taking a class on government, he or she can take an AP music class and thus fulfill a college requirement. If schools dictate graduation coursework then the student could not take the classes they would want to. As a result, they would have to spend more money to take these desired classes in college when they could have saved that money given that they had the opportunity to take those classes in high school.
For those who do not know what careers they would like to embark upon, having a similar line of coursework for high school students to take could prove beneficial in allowing these students to explore different areas of interest. This could spark much hope and passion for their futures assuming that they discover something that they truly enjoy as a result of more diverse coursework. However, for those high school students who do know their desired futures, it would be unfair to subject them to both limitations of career related learning as well as financial burdens that would result from forcing them to take the same classes as their peers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'choosing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: choosing
... benefit for these students. If allowed to choose their coursework in high school, many s...
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Line 5, column 535, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...and thus fulfill a college requirement. If schools dictate graduation coursework t...
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Line 7, column 546, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
... limitations of career related learning as well as financial burdens that would result fro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, thus, well, as to, for example, of course, such as, as a result, as well as, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 478.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6589958159 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36086359865 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426778242678 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5334001336 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.466666667 118.986275619 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8666666667 23.4991977007 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.13333333333 5.21951772744 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146552601588 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720064288765 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043904146226 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115315482417 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513846114989 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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