"A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The recommendation to require all students to study the same curriculum may be beneficial to some students but detrimental to others depending on each student's individual interests and circumstances.
The use of a standard national curriculum allows for students to all build the same academic foundation before entering higher education. Past and current national curriculum plans require specific topics be taught in a variety of standard academic subjects, such as math, English, and science in order to teach basic concepts in each of these subjects. Such a foundation may be useful to students who are unsure of their career and academic interests before and even during college by helping build academic background in a variety of disciplines. By having the opportunity to learn about a variety of subjects, students are able to explore and discover subjects that they enjoy or not and are able to make further career determinations from there. In addition to helping find which certain topics a student may gravite towards, a standardized curriculum imparts basic knowledge across a variety of topics that may be relevant across different career paths, such as the use of chemistry in biology or the use of language arts in a business setting. In such a scenario, a national curriculum is beneficial in both helping students discover fitting career paths as well as aiding the academic background necessary in these paths.
The benefits of this academic curriculum, however, fail to consider the hinderances this curriculum may cause for students interested in disciplines outside of the curriculum framework. If past and current national curriculums serve as a model for our theoritical national curriculum, then such a curriculum model may fail to serve students interested in pursuing the arts, such as in music performance or fine arts. Past and current national curriculums set standards for only academic subjects, not providing education relevant in a career outside of these subjects and therefore forcing students interested in these unserved careers to seek education outside of the standard schooling model. By forcing such students to adhere to academic standards outside of their interests, a national curriculum may serve as a time hinderance to a student's education in topics relevant to them specifically, such as with music lessons and practice or fin arts classes. In such a scenario, a national curriculum may serve as a hinderance to a student's true interests in terms of time dedicated to study as well as a failure to provide basic education in these topics.
Although a lack of education catered towards some topics serves as a disadvantage in a national curriculum system, such a system does allow for other topics to be accessible and explored, creating a discrepeancy th
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
... students discover fitting career paths as well as aiding the academic background necessar...
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Line 5, column 839, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
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Line 5, column 1031, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...curriculum may serve as a hinderance to a students true interests in terms of time dedicat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, in addition, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2370.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 447.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30201342282 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02314705966 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418344519016 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 771.3 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.0852895634 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 182.307692308 118.986275619 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.3846153846 23.4991977007 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184386061261 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885720008535 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487089425142 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126968238258 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407331499645 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.7 14.1392134831 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.51 48.8420337079 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.1743820225 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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