A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
It would be favorable for any nation if it can ensure its every citizen play a role as a competent society member. For this purpose, some people, including the speaker of the given statement, argue that a nation should provide a uniform curriculum for all of its students so that they can be competent citizens to a similar extent. However, besides the extremity of the given argument, I still tend to disagree with the idea of national curriculum due to the differences among individuals and preferences for diversity.
Admittedly, few would disagree that a standardized curriculum provided by a government might be beneficial in some aspects. With a premise that a national curriculum is well-balanced and well-wrought by education specialists, it would be advantageous not only for individuals but also for the whole country. All students would be equipped with an essential and fundamental body of knowledge and, in a long term, they would be able to contribute to the country with their skills and expertise, which was developed upon their basic knowledge provided by the national curriculum.
However, that is only an ideal scenario, if not just daydreaming. Since students are all different from one another, we cannot expect every student develop the same level of knowledge and skills from a nation-provided uniform curriculum. For example, students take and process information in a distinctive ways. Some are better at learning through an audio method, whereas others prefer visual method. Moreover, it has been shown in a number of studies that students better perform when they work on a task interests them. In other words, for some students who are not interested in Math, sitting in an Algebra class would be just wasting their time. Thus, requiring the exactly same curriculum for distinctive students may turn out to be inefficient.
Moreover, even if somehow we could successfully instill every single student the uniform curriculum to the same level, the result may not be so favorable for the whole society. In the modern world, in which diversity and heterogeneousness are highly valued, a nation, whose citizens are educated through a rigid and standardized curriculum, would not be successful. Consider the mobile application market, for example. The most selling products are initiated by creative and different way of thinking, if not peculiar, and this does not seem to be resulted from a forced, standardized education, which might have benefited industrial market in the previous century. This shows that requiring all students of studying a same curriculum contrived by a few people may not only be as effective as some may argue, but even be detrimental for the society.
To sum, despite some advantages of a national curriculum, it turns out to fail to meet different needs of individual students as well as to be somewhat outdated concept of education. Therefore, I strongly argue that a nation should not force its students to follow its uniform curriculum. Instead, it is necessary that they consider different way of learning and interests of each student as well as the purpose of education in the modern world, in which heterogeneity is highly valued.
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every citizen play a role
every citizen plays a role
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You may change the writing style a little bit. Better always argue against one side in three arguments, like this:
paragraph 1: introduction. Suppose we support side A.
paragraph 2: reason 1 + why reason 1 + example of reason 1 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1).
paragraph 3: reason 2 + why reason 2 + example of reason 2 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 2 or comparisons if not reason 2).
paragraph 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. First, ... Second, .... However, there is no causation/relation.... I still support side A... //a little bit change here
paragraph 5: conclusion -- reinforce the thesis.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 517 350
No. of Characters: 2612 1500
No. of Different Words: 239 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.768 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.052 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.906 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 197 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 161 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 117 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.619 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.722 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.81 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 307, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'way'?
Suggestion: way
...nd process information in a distinctive ways. Some are better at learning through an...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'whereas', 'as to', 'for example', 'as well as', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.19652173913 0.240241500013 82% => OK
Verbs: 0.139130434783 0.157235817809 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.107826086957 0.0880659088768 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0695652173913 0.0497285424764 140% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0382608695652 0.0444667217837 86% => OK
Prepositions: 0.133913043478 0.12292977631 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0434782608696 0.0406280797675 107% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.99850124746 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0226086956522 0.030933414821 73% => OK
Particles: 0.00347826086957 0.0016655270985 209% => OK
Determiners: 0.11652173913 0.0997080785238 117% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0330434782609 0.0249443105267 132% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0139130434783 0.0148568991511 94% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3199.0 2732.02544248 117% => OK
No of words: 517.0 452.878318584 114% => OK
Chars per words: 6.18762088975 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.58838876751 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.390715667311 0.366273622748 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.330754352031 0.280924506359 118% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.249516441006 0.200843997647 124% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.160541586074 0.132149295362 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99850124746 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 219.290929204 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47582205029 0.48968727796 97% => OK
Word variations: 55.6270758422 55.4138127331 100% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6194690265 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.619047619 23.380412469 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3394165924 59.4972553346 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.333333333 141.124799967 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.619047619 23.380412469 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.809523809524 0.674092028746 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 57.6944828221 51.4728631049 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.51408450704 1.64882698954 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416952138532 0.391690518653 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0969604120253 0.123202303941 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0731217306095 0.077325440228 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.50099073446 0.547984918172 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.155396645418 0.149214159877 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154637481554 0.161403998019 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992257424878 0.0892212321368 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.336074199605 0.385218514788 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0250834125308 0.0692045440612 36% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291175400462 0.275328986314 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627757195929 0.0653680567796 96% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.4325221239 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 3.66592920354 191% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.5995575221 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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