Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
In recent years, several researchers have looked into the issue of global warming and climate change to see possible remedies to the increasing world temperature. While some aver that wilderness are one of the factors regulates the climate and forestall the exacerbation of current global warming trends, other researchers posit that the wilderness only play little role in climate change and regulation. This contention has led to the deliberation on the importance of wilderness to humankind. As such, the prompt argues that Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if the areas they occupy can be used to develop the economy. I mostly agree with this argument for two main reasons which I will elucidate below. However, I do concede that, in extreme cases, when the economy of country is at peril, and do not have any other alternative to strive, they can utilize some of the natural wilderness area to promote the economy.
To begin, laws preserving natural wilderness areas should be in place because it will help promote biodiversity in plants and animal species. Scientists have confirmed the innumerable benefits human gain from the presence of diversity in species of plants and animals. For instance, the plant ‘iveanwuli gustavo’ are found only in certain wilderness, and these plant species are very important recipes in making certain drugs which humans benefit from. If the wilderness where botanists get these plant species are to be left unpreserved, and allowed to be decimated and be used for economic purposes, such action will yield a detrimental effect on the ongoing health researches that uses some important plant species found in the wilderness. Alternatively, leaving the natural wilderness unpreserved will have a negative effect on wildlife preservation. For instance, it is through the examination of some animal species that scientists have acquired more knowledge on human anatomy. Veterinary doctors got to know that human respiratory tract can be channeled into several dimensions by studying the respiratory tract of zebra which is similar to humans. If there are no wildlife species to study and examine, there is no way scientist will come by such knowledge on human anatomy. In essence, preserving natural wilderness helps to promote plant and animal biodiversity, which helps human make reasonable improvements in our research.
Secondly, preserving wilderness helps to regulate the world climate. The presence of trees and forests in the wilderness serves as an absorber that absorbs many of the carbon dioxide which humans release through several activities. Leaving the wilderness unpreserved, or converting wilderness areas into an urban location where humans leave will deprive us of the benefits that the wilderness supply. As such, the current global warming trend might become worse. To summarize, we need to preserve the remaining wilderness so as to continually benefit from their activities.
Admittedly, there are some instances in which this law is advisable to be compromised. For instance, should there be a major economic crisis whereby the only way for the economy to get back to its feet is the utilization of some of the remaining natural wilderness, I will agree that the laws preserving the wildlife are compromised in this situation, and allow for an immediate economic gain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 924, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...alternative to strive, they can utilize some of the natural wilderness area to promote the ...
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Line 3, column 522, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ed to preserve the remaining wilderness so as to continually benefit from their activiti...
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Line 4, column 224, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... back to its feet is the utilization of some of the remaining natural wilderness, I will ag...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2864.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 537.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33333333333 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87108083971 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467411545624 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 926.1 704.065955056 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.35620463 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.181818182 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4090909091 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04545454545 5.21951772744 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291040784891 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854284500872 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867372048303 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188229569064 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527580201495 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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