Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state even if these areas could be developed for economic gain Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position

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Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

Man has had several corollaries in the Earth we live in. These consequences includes deforestation, global warming and and so on. The degradation of the Earth due to man becomes worse daily and if there are no laws to slow down this degradation, it would continue indefinitely until Earth is uninhabitable for mankind. The prompt argues that countries should put laws and regulations that would protect any remaining forest. I mostly agree with this prompt for two reasons which I would elucidate below. However in some extreme cases, I do concede that wilderness should not be protected.
To begin, forests play a lot of roles for the Earth; destroying these forests could have severe consequences for human. For example, forests help to remove the amount of CO2 in the atmosphere. CO2 traps heat gotten from the sun. If there is an excess of this compound in the atmosphere, it would trap more heat and result in global warming. Studies have shown that trees take away most of the CO2 in the environment. In addition, deforestation could lead to loss of some plant species which may have been beneficial. Perhaps in a scenario where a particular crop only grows in one place and it contains the cure to a deadly disease like HIV, man may have destroyed the only chance it had at fully curing the disease. It is not a new case were scientists find a cure to a malady from a component of a particular plant. Hence is advisable to help protect the available forests because removing them could have dire consequences on humans.
Furthermore, deforestation could have serious consequence for wildlife. Forests help to preserve animals in their natural habitat. These animals may not be able to thrive if these forests are depleted. For example, In South Africa, the erecting of buildings has resulted in the death of some elephants who migrate every year for search of water. The erecting of buildings has made it tougher for these animals to migrate. Similarly, some animal species have gone into extinction because of human factors. The creation of zoos have been a huge help but some animals are being neglected in these zoos. For example, the lions in Obafemi Awolowo University are being underfed because of lack of money and this could have serious effects on the population of lions. If these animals were in the wilderness, they might have looked for ways to get food themselves. In order to protect wildlife, Nations should pass laws that protect wildlife.
Admittedly, in some extreme cases, wilderness should be cut own if it could bring economic success. The main goal of some countries is to make money. One could say that there might not be a point in preserving wilderness when there the country is in debts. For example, -Ogbunike caves Nigeria owned by Mr. Akubuike Festus -brings far less returns than the investment. Mr. Akubike Festus is in debts and further wasting of resources to sustain these caves might not be advisable. These areas surrounding these caves could be sold to companies which could bring money for him in order to remain solvent.
In conclusion, it is advisable for countries to pass laws protecting forests. Nevertheless, in some cases, I think the government should not put laws protecting them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, similarly, so, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2694.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 548.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91605839416 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68894647791 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501824817518 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 845.1 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5314111089 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.6363636364 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6060606061 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250137054338 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645930217886 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528470438818 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142024011772 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482246492334 0.0667264976115 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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