Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural
state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your
reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you
should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain
how these consequences shape your position.
Environmental changes have become major concern among global community nowadays. Therefore afforestation and carbon emission is a major focus area among world environmentalists. Presence of forests or wilderness areas help in keeping the biodiversity of an area balanced as they are rich in biodiversity. Mankind has destroyed innumerable forests for economic as well as other benefits like housing, roads etc. Also industries are emitting toxic gases, Carbon Dioxide etc. to the environment which deteriorates the environment. Presence of wilderness areas like forests helps in neutralization of those emissions to some extent. Therefore it is a need for nations to sanction laws to preserve remaining wilderness areas in natural state at the cost of economic gain. However,
To begin with, economic growth is needed in a nation for uplifting the quality of life of the inhabitants. But economic growth at the cost of the environment is not sustainable. We all are working for a better tomorrow or in other words giving our future generations a better world to live. If we ruthlessly consider economic gains only neglecting the environmental impacts resulting from those gains, it will make the world unhealthy for our future generations. In this regard, nations should preserve the pristine wilderness areas even at the cost of economic gains.
Moreover, the major corporations are trying to do environmental friendly business globally. Therefore they are trying to adopt sustainable business model. For instance, Tata Motors of India were trying to establish a manufacturing plant in a remote village of the state of West Bengal. They were almost at the verge of completion of their plant, when environmental concerns rose by political as well as environmental activists. Tata motors finally relocated their entire plant to another state even if they incurred millions of dollar loss.
Admittedly, sometimes there may be situations when a nation needs to let go some of the pristine wilderness areas for economic need. In those cases, the nation should consider building up equivalent amount of forests or wilderness areas at some other part of the nation. In fact creation of large forests covering hundreds of square kilometres has become reality. For instance, a person, regarded as The Forest Man, namely Mr. Jadav Payeng planted a forest with few hundred square kilometre area in the state of Assam, India. So nations should learn from such instances and ensure that whenever forests or pristine wilderness areas are destroyed, there must be equivalent compensation at different portion of the nation.
In sum, the environment is deteriorating day by day. It is we and our future generations who are going to suffer. Therefore it will be clearly a fruitful step for nations to approve laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their pristine state, even if there is a possibility of economic development at the cost of those areas. However, there may be situations when destruction of such areas become a dire need, in that case nations should ensure proper compensation by plantation of equivalent amount of forests or wilderness areas in some other parts of the nation. This provision to be added in the law.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, as for, for instance, in fact, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2735.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 516.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3003875969 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9968484939 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472868217054 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 880.2 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.4079617438 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6785714286 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03571428571 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316656433189 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0863161185223 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887146777568 0.0758088955206 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192074094986 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832769053379 0.0667264976115 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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