Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In the present century, to compete in the economic market, a nation is more intended to put up any industry and has turned apathetic towards the nations’ forests. The forest area has been reduced by half over the past twenty years with the sole aim of making land for further development. However, if we think critically, then we will observe that abolishing the forests may obliquely hurt a nation’s ability to grow. So, it is necessary for the nations to impose laws to preserve the areas endemic to wild animals despite the fact that the area could be used for industrial development.
Tourism provides a substantial support to the economy of a nation and wilderness areas are no doubt main attraction of tourists. These areas are endemic to different wild animals, many of which are specifically found in a particular area. People from all parts of the world flock to these places and spend few days in search of tranquillity and to see many of these wild species. In absence of the wild areas in their natural state, the place will soon lose its importance and the tourism will be negatively affected. For instance, West Bengal, an economically flourishing state in India, had few remaining wild areas where many endangered flora and fauna were present. But in compliance to the nation’s aim of continuous economic growth, the state has completely removed all of these areas to transform the state into an industrial hub. This myopic decision has plummeted the revenue of West Bengal coming from tourism since the tourists’ attraction had decreased steeply. On the other hand, although Gujarat, another state in India, is facing a dearth of industries because of unfavourable terrain conditions, but it is still prospering via tourism since Geer Forest is specifically famous for the White Lions, which are not found anywhere in the world.
As more land will be available, there is an obvious chance to develop the land for economic gain purposes. And the development will be seriously thwarted had the nation imposed laws to preserve the wilderness areas. But we need to keep in mind that plants are one important altruistic creatures on world who can save the world from increasing global warming and environmental pollution. As these areas will be cleared, the pollution levels will be escalated quickly which will pose a threat to the mankind. Similar instance has been found in Delhi where a small forest in the vicinity is axed with the motive to set up a steel industry. Soon, the particulate matters level in the air has rose to such an extent that it is impossible to see anything even in a sunny day.
Indeed, removing wilderness for the sake of economic prosperity may sometimes act as a disservice and therefore it is much crucial for a nation to save these areas. As a result, the nation should pass the necessary laws and take actions accordingly.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, as to, for instance, no doubt, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2409.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94661190965 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7753072633 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52977412731 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4950629826 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.45 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.35 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328365843118 0.243740707755 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946117691798 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612567249177 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187358876895 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160779976202 0.0667264976115 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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