Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their
citizens are hungry or unemployed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with
the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In
developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how
these examples shape your position.
Music, literature and Arts are the essence of our human minds. To quote Robin Williams in 'Dead Poet's Society'- "Science, Engineering, Law these are important for human life, but music, beauty, arts- are things that keep us alive.'' Inspite of starting my response with a strong inclination towards arts, I strongly agree with the statement the prompt provides - Hunger & unemployment cannot be quenched with arts, Government should be focusing on solving issues that directly affect people's basic needs. I will explain my position with two reasoning.
Firstly, We all know five basic human needs - Food, Clothes, Shelter, Education and Health. Arts and music is needed, for sure, but can one feed on music when hungry, or drink literary pieces when thirsty? Many great artists and writers have contributed greatly to their respective fields even under bad circumstances and national crisis. But to expect governmental funding for them instead of spending those funds for hungry, malnourished and unemployed destitute people is a bit outrageous. History has always supported the theory recommended in the prompt.During the liberation war of Bangladesh in 1971, artists and writers motivated the freedom fighters and general people to fight against the oppressors, thus contributing to the solution of the national crisis. But most people in Bangladesh were jobless and strike with maddening hunger, so the financial help and funds from other countries were entirely spent in supporting the general people devoid of basic needs, not those who were practicing arts in a very effective and memorable way. When the majority of the nation needs food or jobs, squandering funds on arts and music cannot be supported.
Further, there are well-established theories about stages of development. It's no wonder that arts and music are not appreciated or does not flourish well in an hunger stricken country. When the national economy is strong enough, general people can spend their time in practicing and appreciating arts, funding them to support the artists who also enjoys the perquisites of a well-developed nation. But if a third-world country plans to fund arts when people are hunger stricken and unemployed, it should be considered a great luxury. Until a nation reaches a the final stage of the development hierarchy, funding for arts will always be scarce, and even non-existing when facing nationwide crisis.
Good music can soothe one's soul, good arts can be treat to eyes and a good piece of literature always broadens a mind. A good body cannot survive without the peace of mind. This philosophical point of view makes assuming a rigid position very hard. But when you think of people dying of hunger, wanting funds for your artworks does seem egregious. So, the reasoning presented above strongly supports the thesis. Government funding should be allocated in a way so that majority of people can fulfill their needs, people being the utmost priority in a nation. So arts and culture can survive and thrive later as long as people live to exercise and promulgate them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, third, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2586.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 495.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22424242424 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77243724613 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557575757576 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9071143657 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.434782609 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5217391304 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.26086956522 5.21951772744 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212341659415 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593600901292 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460691864386 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131840591989 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00707863219806 0.0667264976115 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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