People are loosing their problem solving capacity, due to increasing dependence on technology.
Technological innovations have already been established as the preeminent advancement in human civilization. Even though present in various forms, all the present technologies have already been an integral part of human life. The continuation of quotidian tasks, in the absence of modern technology is not possible. But, this does not implies that with the increasing reliance on technologies for solving problems and making our life easier, there is corroborate degradation in the rationality of human minds. Furthermore, in my view, technologies instead help us to enrich out mental and physical potential. So, I do not completely agree with the provided statement and would like to rest my case, on the basis of following three examples.
The basic aim of every technological innovation is simple. It aims to make our life easier by causing gradual decrease in time and effort applied. Ranging from the primordial inventions like animal plough to the recent inventions like Artificial intelligence computers, all were developed for the same purpose. But, the advantages are not limited to this, technologies also help us to advance our research and problem solving ability. With every technological development there is a similar development in the intuitive and rational ability of human mind. For example before the Apollo moon landing, the possibility of even thinking, life outside of earth was of meager possibility. However, when Neil Armstrong conquered the moon then the scientist did not take a break. But, they used this milestone as a landmark and then started reaching for farther planets mars. Now, this dream has also been realized due to the technological advancement in the field. And, we certainly cannot imply that this will be the end of our research and there will be further deterioration in our problem solving ability. Instead, we will search for further cumbersome problems and enrich our capacity.
Similar, example can be taken from the field of medicine. Scientist have been in the quest of search for a panacea for the HIV virus, since a decade ago. Various promising results have already been found and it is being claimed that we area at the verge of finding a cure. We cannot denote that after this cure is found, scientist will stop looking for further research. It is possible that this quench of thirst will further increase the hunger of searching cure for even more complex problems. Additionally, the time and effort saved by the use of technology, can possibly be used for further reasearch and innovations. In the modern world, where time is money, this saved time can be allocated to enrich our research skills.
Many may argue that , with the increasing dependence in technologies, people become more lethargic and their cognitive ability is decreased. It is a valid argument. But, thus does not implies to all the people. As evident from the youths of 21st century, many are living a sedentary lifestyle, by completely indulging in the pleasure of computer technologies. However, there are plenty of evidences, in which the same youths have proved to show superior skills and talents and furthermore they also claim that their dependence on computers was just a way of toning their skills, not a detraction. So, I do not agree with the statement provided above and would like to state that may be applicable only in few circumstances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 336, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'imply'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: imply
...ogy is not possible. But, this does not implies that with the increasing reliance on te...
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Line 1, column 336, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'imply'
Suggestion: imply
...ogy is not possible. But, this does not implies that with the increasing reliance on te...
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Line 1, column 452, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'corroborated'.
Suggestion: corroborated
...ms and making our life easier, there is corroborate degradation in the rationality of human...
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Line 3, column 855, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'planets'' or 'planet's'?
Suggestion: planets'; planet's
...k and then started reaching for farther planets mars. Now, this dream has also been rea...
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Line 5, column 563, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
... effort saved by the use of technology, can possibly be used for further reasearch and innov...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: Much may; A good deal of may
...ocated to enrich our research skills. Many may argue that , with the increasing depend...
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Line 7, column 20, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...r research skills. Many may argue that , with the increasing dependence in techn...
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Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'imply'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: imply
...is a valid argument. But, thus does not implies to all the people. As evident from the ...
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Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'imply'
Suggestion: imply
...is a valid argument. But, thus does not implies to all the people. As evident from the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, then, thus, for example, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2834.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 551.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14337568058 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88026330271 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506352087114 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 894.6 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4878964947 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4666666667 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3666666667 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12493365297 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0275356453772 0.0831039109588 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491258415301 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0711598919269 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396749339701 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 100.480337079 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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