As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
GRE Issue 1
As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
The technology improvement seems like a burst in the history of mankind. When the technology is utilized by people to solve problems, people often abandon the original solution and embrace the technology due to convenience and simplicity. Thus the technology progress, inevitably, changed the people’s lifestyles and activities and formed their new ways of living. The claim is valid only when there is a direct relationship between the reliance on technology and the ability of humans to thinks for themselves and the deterioration happens accordingly. However, chances are the above conditions do not hold true. The claim of the declination of human’s mind is therefore fallacious.
Although it is true that people lose some abilities thanks to the technology, but it is also true that people gain new abilities based on technology improvements. This has been proven by indisputable historical facts. For example, after the invention of calculator, people no longer need to work with complicated arithmetic by themselves. The calculators’ computational power and accuracy outperformed human’s capability soon after they are invented, so there is an obvious tendency that people stop upgrading their ‘human-brain calculation’ abilities. Yet the invention of calculator didn’t undermine the capability of human, but enhance their ability in harder mathematics. The proof of “four color theorem” cannot be done without the assistance of calculator. To assess the overall ability after the invention of calculator may be difficult because these two abilities are not comparable, and in this example it is unclear whether the trade for new abilities is good or not.
Even if we accept the existence of the relationship between technology enhancement and the deterioration of human thinking ability, the fact shows the opposite of the claim. People’s lives now are distinctively different from the ancient people’s. Technologies that change people’s lifestyles dramatically include the invention of steam engine, cars, electric lights, computers, …. Almost every invention of technology that ultimately adopted by people shares common traits: convenience.
The way that technologies affect people is to facilitate people’s lives. Therefore, it is more likely that the people can spend less energy to solve the same problem.
To conclude, the claim of this issue is misleading.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 386.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.75906735751 5.05705443957 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37894653088 2.79657885939 121% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564766839378 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.6737980595 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.857142857 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.380952381 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238033252462 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785432274627 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103237396775 0.0758088955206 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177123595799 0.150359130593 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.177905644415 0.0667264976115 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 48.8420337079 74% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.1639044944 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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