As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to
think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
The topic raises a controversial issue whether the development of high technology deteriorate humans' ability to think. Many would agree with this preposition pointing out some observations that people rely heavily on technology and relinguish their roles to computers. However, I still believe that the ability of humans to think is still untaneable despite the modern technology.
Admittedly, few would deny that some activities require people to use their brain vanished. To illustrate, people no longer memorize phone numbers of friends and family, just write down on their smartphones. In addition, instead of spending time with solve mathematical equations, people use computer to solve the equations. At first glance, these phenomenon are easily deemed as a bad situations, making negative impacts on people's brain activities. However, increased usage of computers or machines does not automatically indicate decline of people's intellectural ability. Rather, they liberate people from mandane tasks and help them to focus on much harder tasks.
Some opponents would also insist that nowadays problem no longer require people to solve difficult real-life problems since developed technologies solve almost every problems in societies. The argument is understanable because technology already gave answers for some problems that once thought cannot be solved. For example, a cancer, once thought never recovered, is now considered as curable disease. Also, meales massacred a number of people in the past, but can be easily protected. Nonetheless, new technology also yields many challenging that humans have to figure out in the future. To be specific, the advent of artificial intelligence (AI) causes controversial topics; To what extent mankinds can use the technology without deteriorate human's value? Who is responsible for potential accidents come from AI? What is the solution for the situation where a ton of positions for workers are supplanted by AI? These issues arise from potential dangers IA has. Just like the case of AI, any technology can entail potential challenges that humans should solve in the future.
In sum, despite some brain activities decrease because of technolgy, it mostly helps people to solve more challenging problems and gives them the problems. Taken together, I cannot fully agree with the statement that the ability of humans to think will be surely aggrevated due to the rising technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 343, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this phenomenon' or 'these phenomena', 'these phenomenons'?
Suggestion: this phenomenon; these phenomena; these phenomenons
...o solve the equations. At first glance, these phenomenon are easily deemed as a bad situations, ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 387, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'situation'?
Suggestion: situation
...e phenomenon are easily deemed as a bad situations, making negative impacts on peoples bra...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nonetheless, so, still, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 373.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60857908847 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88715176884 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592493297587 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1336878394 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.619047619 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7619047619 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7619047619 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288442275781 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070257537117 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404014912064 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166247940991 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496337841324 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.96 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.