As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Relying on technology to solve problems increase the thirst for finding a better method for solving the problem in a more efficient way which enables humans to think of themselves more and more.
Relying on technology made humans life easier than before. In modern days calculator performs daily calculations instead of the human brain. Motor vehicles reduced the human effort to reach different locations by walking. Television, refrigerator, air conditional, heater all are commonly used in households for knowing what happened in the outside, preserving foods for long times, to create an artificial room temperature that suits most in summer and winter respectively. A common question arises in that situation, is relying on technology will deteriorate our ability to think for ourselves? Definitely not, rather relying on technology will surely increase our ability to think for ourselves. For example, let's think about vehicles. In the ancient world after the invention of wheel humans use animal labor for transportation. In the meantime, due to low speed, they engaged themselves to increase the speed they invented motor vehicles. But human efforts do not end with motor vehicles, after the invention of motor vehicles they concentrated much on the limitations of motor vehicles i.e, its speed, not compatible in air or water, safety. And step by step they invented ship, the airplane, even self-driven cars, drones, etc. In the same manner for calculation purpose day by day, we increase our level of thinking in the more strategic and smart way and invented calculator, the computer, supercomputers and now scientists are trying to invent quantum computer for faster calculations.
However relying on technoly enables peoples to became more lazy in simple works for examples doing minor calculation at the mini shop using calculaor instead using brain which enables reduction of ones ability to calculate. Going small distances using bi-cycles or motor cycle rather than walking which will definitely reduces his abilty to walking and running. And few peoples always rely on technology rather than solving his proplems on this own.
Relying on technology made our life easier, and humans are not satisfied with that level of advancement and we are constantly seeking more advanced method and technology to solve our problem. So relying on technology enables humans to solve the problem in a more efficient way and thus human's ability to think for themselves increases.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
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Suggestion: However,
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... using brain which enables reduction of ones ability to calculate. Going small dista...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 391.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39641943734 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79710755536 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.765694273 60.3974514979 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.222222222 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7222222222 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.16666666667 5.21951772744 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337784477137 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117571956595 0.0831039109588 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0979262292511 0.0758088955206 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250427397213 0.150359130593 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0744562565238 0.0667264976115 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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