As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Some may believe technology hampers the ability of humans to think because nowadays, people do have the tendency to use the assistance of technology to solve even the smallest problems such as calculation or looking for an information. While this may be true, I do not think that the ability to think for themselves deteriorate because of technology. I would further discuss the reasons to why I believe in such way below.
First of all, thanks to technology, we do not have to be concerned with and spend our effort on negligible problems. We instead have the opportunity to worry about bigger problems such as discovering scientific facts or inventing new technology that can improve the quality of humans lives. For example, after computers have been invented, we do not have to spend our time on calculating complex numerical problems because computers would do that for us. Humans can rather worry about harder problems that require knowledge and creativity. Just like a famous idiom, computers can do the easy work that only needs time and labor, humans can do the hard work that requires brain and knowledge. Some may argue that humans should not rely on technology even for small problems because that could lead to humans not being able to perform calculation by themselves. However, if humans are working much harder and complex work, why bother to spend our precious effort on easier jobs when it could be done with the help of technology? I do not think that this deters the ability of humans to think for themselves.
Furthermore, technology actually provide us more time to focus on ourselves. Back in the day, humans had to walk or ride horses as main transportation. For them, their major concerns were about where to sleep tonight or how much food is left for them to keep on going. However, because nowadays technology helps us get to places without any of our effort, we can instead use our commute time reading newspapers or socializing with friends. For example in my case, I use my commute time memorizing vocabularies or do my assignments. I sometimes even just sleep to give rest to my brain or think about my future. However, if I had to walk all the way to my destined place, I wouldn't have had the strength to do so.
To sum up, I understand why some people might claim that relying on technology to solve problems can deteriorate the ability of humans to think for themselves because it there won't be any problems for humans to solve if technology does it for them. However, I believe that technology enables human to worry about much more complex problems and provide us strength and time to think and worry about ourselves, instead of worrying about negligible and unimportant problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, while, for example, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 467.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8244111349 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69165478459 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441113490364 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0827559223 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.65 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.35 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212549364778 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749834666516 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688214122472 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161952726152 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700773264594 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.