As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The power this world got in the recent past due to the developments in the field of technology has made a path for present or coming generation to solve the yet unsolved problems which was hitherto impossible to even talk about. Things like internet has empowered people at such a large scale that now even isolated communities are able to educate their children and to make them scientists. This is because they can rely on internet for their studies and that studies can help them to think critically and to solve their social and economic problems. But some conventional pundits believe that our increasing dependence on technology will result in diminishing our cognitive capabilities.
In my opinion, increasing use of technology to solve problems will not mitigate but will increase our thinking capabilities. Technology helps us to save our time from non-essential things to productivities. For instance, machines in our homes like washing machine, dishwasher and cleaning robots supplant our physical work that consumes lot of time if done manually. This saved time helps particularly women to utilize it for her educational or professional work which surely enhances their cognitive abilities because perfunctory tasks are not consuming mind as such. Similarly, advancement in transportation benefits commuters to save their time and that enhances their productive time. Thus, technology helps people to create more productive time.
Moreover, digital shift happened in the last few decades created unprecedented space for people to think at another level. Electronic gadgets and internet eased mass communication and make this world a single entity. People need not to go to libraries for finding or searching their relevant stuff and can do the things with a machine in their hands. With this, people are now more aware and ask questions to others in their routine life. For instance, when people go to shops or showrooms for buying anything they can’t be fooled by the salesperson because they can compare prices and quality via online stores. Thus, technology make them more informed and comparatively, informed person can think more.
Therefore, use of technology enhances the abilities of people to think more to solve their problems. However, technology is also not without flaws. Its addition and illicit use can bring its negative aspects to the front. Artificial Intelligence can become a threat for populations as with this some people can track lives and activities of large populations and use this information to dominate them or direct them to their intended way, thus, people can be fooled. But this thing can be taken care of by populated governments through advance vigilant techniques. Overall, correct use of technology will make people more cognitive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: NEEDNT_TO_DO_AND_DONT_NEED_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'go'?
Suggestion: go
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2353.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 442.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32352941176 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87182863793 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 749.7 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3759652468 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.954545455 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0909090909 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22727272727 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227610993993 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777434868903 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596849617694 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150779073691 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215874768603 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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