People’s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making
I believe that some people could do what they want to do, while others only obey forces which contradict their personal willingness. It really depends on the personal condition which could be a determinant factor if people are allowed to follow their mind discretionarily or not.
Most of time, people have to capitulate by the economic pressure and are not allowed to pursue their preferred jobs. For example, In Taiwan, poor students are always asked to study hard to get permission to doctor degree, because it is much promising and better opportunities to earn a lot of money after graduation. Especially in poor families, the students are even forced to take persistent examinations until they could get the doctor admitted to the medical school. Thus, most people in Taiwan have to purse promising work for economic reason, even they don’t like it all.
On the contrary, some lucky people are always following their mind under particular circumstances. They may get the family fortune and would get rid of the economic burden which is always a problem to the ordinary people. For instance, the son of Buffet is a musician, because he has no economic pressure at all, he could do what he would like to do.
Besides the career aspect, general people are capable of developing their personal habits, like art, sports, shopping and so forth. For example, in Taiwan, ordinary workers would play basketball or go to a gym after work. They go to do exercising because they want to do out of personal willingness. In these cases, their behaviors are not determined by forces, but interesting. Like kinds of personal habits and I believe that, mostly, these behavior are coming from personal preference. Of these activities, they’re absolutely doing what they want to do.
Though It is certainly true that the behavior of people in particular area is largely decided by forces. For example, The dictator of the north Korea, Kim Jong un, has restrained his people of a nation. The jobs of people are assigned by the government and they have no personal choice but follow their authority. Many people are forced to do plenty of laborious tasks and violated their personal willingness, this phenomenon is specially severe in the centered power country.
In conclusion, people aren’t able to follow their hearts for economic reasons, or even some people in the dictator’s nation are forced to perform the government’s order, while general people are allowed to do their habits in their leisure time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 437, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this behavior' or 'these behaviors'?
Suggestion: this behavior; these behaviors
...onal habits and I believe that, mostly, these behavior are coming from personal preference. Of...
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Line 4, column 557, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... absolutely doing what they want to do. Though It is certainly true that the behavior ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, may, really, so, thus, while, even so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 416.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02884615385 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7192292392 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497596153846 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1448692014 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.6 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45 5.21951772744 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258665703558 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893144822355 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810659996975 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156996734003 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797933564704 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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