People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
My general belief is that people’s behavior is influenced both by forces and their own making, and the different levels of impacts between these two types of influencers are contingent on the contexts, which from the large to the small scale are the political regimes, the life stages, and the types of behavior. Therefore, I can only partially agree with the prompt in that people’s behavior is highly contextual, so it is not precise to claim that they are largely decided purely by forces.
To begin with, it is common to notice the dissimilarity of people’s behavior between countries dominated by democracy and dictatorship. For people who live in democratic countries, most of the behavior is decided by their own will, especially this can be proved from the rights to vote for the presidents every four years. The deployment of vote rights give people the power to express their own decision toward the political results. In other words, the collection of people’s own will form the force that politicians should follow. In contrast, people who stay in the countries ruled by dictators generally regulate their own behavior according to the politician’s power and preference, therefore limit the growth and the execution of people’s own will. For the notorious example: China. People are not allowed to use most of the popular internet services, such as Facebook, Google etc. And people can’t disclose any government corruption, even though they have their own will to let the mass understand the problem of governments. Hence, I would say that people who are controlled by dictatorship may form their behavior more by forces than their own will.
Secondly, people behaved differently in light of various life stages, which means when we are younger, our behavior may be decided more by the forces, while getting older, we are our own navigator which form the behavior more by our own will. For example, when we are teenagers, we are regulated by lots of school laws, and we are largely told what should or shouldn’t be done. However, after we grew up, we have more understanding and opinions about ourselves as well as the society. By then we generally decide our own behavior shaped by our own will, instead of purely others’ thoughts or external forces.
Last, even when we examine the context down to the action level, it is obvious to find that some of our actions are triggered by forces, or in other words habits, while some others are formed by deep thoughts, which relates more to our own will. For instance, when we decide the route to the office, since it is the same everyday, this type of action may be dominated by forces. On the other hand, when we are considering the investment opportunities, we definitely account more on our will.
To sum, i would emphasize that this prompt is highly contextual, and people always leverage two different types of influencers to help them to live a better life. However, when there is more freedom, people are encouraged more to use their own will instead of forces to guide life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ute to the office, since it is the same everyday, this type of action may be dominated b...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ly account more on our will. To sum, i would emphasize that this prompt is hig...
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Line 8, column 268, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'guiding'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: guiding
...to use their own will instead of forces to guide life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, such as, as well as, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2552.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 516.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94573643411 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68089038321 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463178294574 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 793.8 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8992050824 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.6 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 5.21951772744 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182388378267 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674509876845 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421785774521 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109972448095 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571791435996 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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