People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Individuals have a natural tendency to try not to put themselves down in the views of the society. They constantly try to change their behavior to what might make the society venerate and admire them more. Hence I do agree with the statement that the behavior of the people is largely influenced and determined by forces rather than their own making. I hold this opinion due to two main reasons.
Firstly, people have always been anxious about their image in the society. They uplift themselves in the eyes of the society they live in and trying to live upto the expectations of those around them. For instance, there are so many children who choose a particular career only to please their parents. Or different actors who live only on protein powders and diet pills as also do excessively laborious exercises and take steroids, just to look fit for their fans. This may even take a toll on their health instead of making them fit. The above examples demonstrate that people many a times place their decisions in the hands of other people directly or indirectly just so that it makes them more liked or respected.
Secondly, many a times people do not want to stand out negatively or be the only ones opposing a consensus. For example, in a company if a single person is against a certain idea, it is highly likely he will alter his opinion only because he does not want to be the only one holding back the implementation of the idea. Thus even if the employee is sure that this idea is going to cost them and cause losses, he votes for it so as to avoid being scorned and being put in the bad books of his superiors for contradicting their decisions.
Being driven by forces from the society is not always negative, for example, a student choosing a career of his parents’ choice maybe beneficial to him in the long-run or a very obese person going on a diet after being ridiculed by his peers can be salubrious for him.
While some argue that, there are people who do not let their actions and decisions be affected by the society, it is for a fact that the numbers of such people are miniscule. Also many a times such attitudes come along with some pathological conditions like being sociopathic or psychopathic.
In conclusion, due to the innate characteristic of a human being to be liked and respected, a majority of individuals are likely to rest their behavioral tendencies and actions be controlled and determined by a variety of outside forces
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... society venerate and admire them more. Hence I do agree with the statement that the ...
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Suggestion: a time; times
...e examples demonstrate that people many a times place their decisions in the hands of o...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ng back the implementation of the idea. Thus even if the employee is sure that this ...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... them and cause losses, he votes for it so as to avoid being scorned and being put in th...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e numbers of such people are miniscule. Also many a times such attitudes come along ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a time' or simply 'times'?
Suggestion: a time; times
...of such people are miniscule. Also many a times such attitudes come along with some pat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 436.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66055045872 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63894262543 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511467889908 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8294898341 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.529411765 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6470588235 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 5.21951772744 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148513206628 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556375526166 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599118708636 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0822484298752 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474240618987 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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