People who are the most deeply committed to an idea or policy are also the most critical of it.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Commitment is most important aspect in anyone's life. If people are commited to their ideas or aims, definitely, they will achieve their aim or advocation for their idea. Therefore, I mostly agree with the argument that the people will be critical if they are commited to an idea or policy upto a certain point.
First of all, students who are really commited to their academic life, to achieve their goals and being successful in their carrier, are really critical for their academics. For instance, CEO of Google, Sunder Pichai, when he was a student really inclined to his studies and academics. Even his financial condition was not well, he was determined to pursue higher education in US and being successful in life. Consequently, after his altercation with destitution and tenacious assiduous work, he is now a very successful in life. Hence, it showed that if a person is deeeply commited to his policy of determination and achievement of goal, he or she can remain critical of it.
Secondly, if a group of people is not deeply commited to their ideology, he is not going to hold his critical approach for a long time. For instance, if a politician and his delegation is not commited about an public issue or minimizing criminal offences, it won't hold water to eradicate that problem. If government makes certain rules and regulation for a particular crime and not resoluted to track records of crime after making rules in act, crime rate might not decrese and government's rules and regulations about that crime fail to achieve lower crime rate. Therefore, If government is not serious about handling it's policy, it can't be critical enough to make good changes.
However, sometimes people who are extermists about their commitments fail to being critical just because of exacerbating their commitments and try to become perfectionists rather than to being an accurate and loose their critical level after could not achieve their policy. Hence, often it is not advisible to become to exaggerate commitment.
In conclusion, people who mostly deepened to their commitments are critical of it and likely to achieve what they want to. But, sometimes extremism towards commitment lower their self esteem and loose critical thinking or approach.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'determined'.
Suggestion: determined
...inancial condition was not well, he was determine to pursue higher education in US and be...
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Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... can remain critical of it. Secondly, if a group of people is not deeply commi...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...nd his delegation is not commited about an public issue or minimzing criminal off...
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Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mited about an public issue or minimzing criminal offences, it wont hold water to...
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Line 5, column 641, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...t serious about handling its policy, it cant be critical enough to make good changes...
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Line 5, column 641, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...t serious about handling its policy, it cant be critical enough to make good changes...
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Line 7, column 27, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...d changes. Finally, sometimes people who are extermists about their commitments fail...
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Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...ts rather than to being an accurate and loose their critical level after could not ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 370.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07297297297 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7718571592 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489189189189 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7560225329 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.3125 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.125 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 5.21951772744 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173666857377 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702366839631 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608777611205 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117635556205 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615943796269 0.0667264976115 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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