It is widely accepted that people will have at least one passionate issue in life and will be deeply committed to studying or engaging in those things. The prompt argued that people who are the most deeply committed to an idea or policy are also the most critical of it. In my opinion, in contrast to the prompt, I think that people who are in love with some idea or policy will be the most supportive instead of the most critical. There are two possible explanations that I will explain in the following.
To begin, all ideas and policies have both advantages and disadvantages; however, people who are committed to them will easily look past the disadvantages of the ideas. For instance, in Thailand, there are a lot of people who encourage the free using of tobacco and cannabis. While normal people acknowledge that these substances have their advantages for curing palliative patients to have a better appetite or better sleep, they are also against the freely used policy because these substances can cause addiction and brain damage that will never be recovered. However, people who have committed to freely using tobacco and cannabis may not care about anybody who is against this policy due to their passion, even though there are a lot of studies about the negative effects of these substances. Moreover, they may look past the negative effects. If they look past these negative sides of the policy, how will they be most critical of it?
In addition, people who have committed to the idea or policy will further support it, which contrasts with the prompt because they want their ideas to be accepted by other people in the society. There is a study that demonstrates people want to be respected in some ways, for example, for their ideas, work, or honor. Similarly, people who love using cannabis may want others to accept their ideas so that they feel respected by others. This group of people may engage the government to encourage the free use of cannabis. Once their commitments come true, they will be successful and feel proud. It is not sensible if they want to criticize it, which could possibly make them stop using cannabis freely and cause them to be ignored by others.
In conclusion, some people could say that people who are the most deeply committed to an idea or policy are also the most critical of it. If they are true, these ideas and policies will not be started in our society, as they always criticize the policies, and their ideas will cease in some ways. These people may not commit to the idea anymore after shutting it down by themselves. Thus, I believe that people who are deeply passionate about some issues will not be the most criticized for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 653, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...ble if they want to criticize it, which could possibly make them stop using cannabis freely an...
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Line 5, column 744, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and cause them to be ignored by others. In conclusion, some people could say tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, moreover, similarly, so, thus, while, as to, at least, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 469.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76119402985 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43342719519 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.402985074627 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 718.2 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1187808882 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.526315789 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6842105263 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0526315789 5.21951772744 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242741373509 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100989779148 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0870094447148 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191427046797 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659983820573 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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