People who have the talent to develop their own ideas may not be able to contribute much to the society if they are unable to present their skills in a suitable manner. On the other hand, people who have the inborn talent to recognize and coordinate the skills of others would be contributing more to the society that they live in. In other words, most of the important contributions are made to the society by the people who are adept at coordinating the skills of others and not by those people who develop their own ideas.
Music is the embodiment of today's world. The prompt recommends us that the real talent of a popular musician cannot be accurately assessed until the musician has been dead for several generations because of prejudice against the musician during his career. I mostly agree with the assertion of assessing musicians after their life span by giving two reasons.
TO start with, a musician in his prime is often influenced with lot of love as well as hatred for his work. To illustrate, consider Michael Jackson who is a renowned musician mostly recognized and appreciated after almost fifty years. In his prime, Jackson had many fans for his music and consummately he was criticized by the critics. Jackson was often caricatured for his song writing and it's influence on the youth but michael was appreciated for his dancing abilities. Fifty years after he is judged as an erudite song writer as well. Hence, sometimes an individuals actions may lead to the negativity during his era whereas after the individual is dead there is no bias against him.
Moreover, many a times musicians is judged by gender. For example, consider Latha Mangeshkar, she is tailed as India's greatest music talent. During Latha's tenure she was often disparaged for her gender, many songs were simply discarded by the critics of previous era but now Latha's voice is deemed as a nightingale of India. This explains why a musicians abilities can be properly assessed only after several generations.
On the contrary, In the contemporary world as the advent of social media upheld the entire world, more honest assessments are being generated. No one are judged immorally, if the talent can be seen thoroughly in musicians song composition and singing musician is regarded instantly with many praises. To conclude, the prompt can be applied for past generation musicians but in this generations talent is assessed by its merit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'Indias the greatest'.
Suggestion: Indias the greatest
...ider Latha Mangeshkar, she is tailed as Indias greatest music talent. During Lathas tenure she ...
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Line 7, column 383, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
...r past generation musicians but in this generations talent is assessed by its merit.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, may, moreover, so, well, whereas, for example, as well as, on the contrary, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1599.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 313.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10862619808 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74296361276 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565495207668 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0166635814 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9375 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5625 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0658917074208 0.243740707755 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0243402198396 0.0831039109588 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0252185177788 0.0758088955206 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0459539816067 0.150359130593 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198725632327 0.0667264976115 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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