The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Unity is the major prospect of a nation's development. The prompt recommends us that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership roles is through a sense of coöperation, not competition. I mostly agree with the assertion that coöperation brings good leadership, however a sense of competition also helps an individual.

TO start with, coöperation often brings a sense of responsibility and leads to a unified thought. To illustrate, Gandhi a renowned practitioner of non-violence, peace and harmony. Gandhi being born in an intellectual family with a sense of morality, from his childhood by reading several novels he learnt what it means to be unified. His thoughts bought a revolutionary change in Indian history. Gandhi is the epitome of the thought "coöperation".

On the contrary, Competition improves a child's hunger for innovation, it makes them achieve impossible tasks. For example, consider Sundhar Pichai, who is the CEO of top IT firm Google. In his recent interview he stated that he was quite competitive from his childhood. Pichai is an IIT graduate and done his masters at Stanford University. Pichai from his childhood feared loosing and his competitive spirit made him as one of the powerful person in the World. He successfully led Google in solving many problems related to AI, Big data and IOT.

To conclude, a good leader comes from a sense of responsibility and a constant thrive to improve our world. Harmony and rivalry are the key upbringing of an individual effectiveness as a leader.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, for example, on the contrary, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 12.4196629213 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1308.0 2235.4752809 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 252.0 442.535393258 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19047619048 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.36818514957 2.79657885939 120% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 215.323595506 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630952380952 0.4932671777 128% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 704.065955056 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8724695319 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.75 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.75 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177073412054 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521330444676 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120633850811 0.0758088955206 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113589636493 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136785667009 0.0667264976115 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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