A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Selection of a student curriculum is not a trivial one. The prompt recommends us to adopt uniform curriculum for students of entire nation until they enter college. I mostly disagree with the assertion by giving a reason.
TO start with, a nation which is diverse in its culture and language cannot adopt this technique. To illustrate, consider a richly diverse country like India. India has 27 active states and each state comprises of contrasting languages. TO understand further, consider two separate states from India namely Telangana and Bangalore. Both states have their unique mother tongues where the former speaks Telugu and the later speaks Kannada. Hence, it is impossible to embark common curriculum for both. even, for the entire nation like India.
On the contrary, consider a more unified nation like America. In America, their native language is English, so every state in america speaks common tongue and there is no contrasting diversity. In country like America author's approach can be adopted. Most of the American states have common curriculum and their approach made them produce some remarkable innovators. Some of the prominent one's are Elon Musk, Steve Jobs, who in their speeches hailed american education system.
In conclusion, idea of author is quite intricate, it may or may not be hold in certain regions as mentioned above. But, if it comes good there can be an increase in uniformly skilled labor.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, may, so, in conclusion, on the contrary, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 58.6224719101 51% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1209.0 2235.4752809 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 232.0 442.535393258 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21120689655 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.55969084622 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59566875471 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 215.323595506 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.64224137931 0.4932671777 130% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 704.065955056 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.770199824 60.3974514979 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.1176470588 118.986275619 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.6470588235 23.4991977007 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.11764705882 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164434938379 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550856115746 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0938733525746 0.0758088955206 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112063534967 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123818613146 0.0667264976115 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 48.8420337079 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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