The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News:
"The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built."
In the letter from the editorial it is stated that in order to preserve the region's bio diversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built. The author have come to this conclusion based on the similar pattern that is previously observed in Eastern Carpenteria in 1978. However, before this argument can be evaluated, two questions must be answered.
To start with, author prematurely concludes by simply comparing West Lansburg with Eastern Carpenteria. To further illustrate, from the argument Eastern Carpentia had its decline of sea otter population in 1978 but author just compares the pattern with no evidence of similarity. perhaps, the population decline of sea otter is due to the lack of natural resources for that species to survive. sea otter may require lots of water, and during 1978 there may be a severe drought and due to this natural phenomenon the population may decline. If the above scenario has merit, then conclusion drawn in the argument is significantly weakened.
secondly, author concludes by assuming a ban on construction of access road along the edge of Wetlands consummately increases biodiversity and it ensures a healthy environment. To illustrate, even, if the construction of road is halted there is no proof of increasing bio diversity and healthy surroundings. perhaps, due to the pause in road construction many inhabitants living there can suffer because of lack of road facility during emergencies. Further, the surroundings can be even degraded due to tufted groundhog if they go violent towards people. If the above is true then the argument does not hold water.
To conclude, the argument as it stands is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the above questions and offer more evidence, regarding the various effects of halting road and construction and the reliance between two areas, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation of stopping road construction.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 334 350
No. of Characters: 1708 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.275 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.114 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.923 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.032 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.046 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 77, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'regions'' or 'region's'?
Suggestion: regions'; region's
...is stated that in order to preserve the regions bio diversity and ensure a healthy envi...
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Line 3, column 281, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...pattern with no evidence of similarity. perhaps, the population decline of sea otter is...
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Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Sea
... resources for that species to survive. sea otter may require lots of water, and du...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
... argument is significantly weakened. secondly, author concludes by assuming a ban on ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 309, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...bio diversity and healthy surroundings. perhaps, due to the pause in road construction ...
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Line 5, column 556, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dhog if they go violent towards people. If the above is true then the argument doe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 334.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24550898204 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01997129335 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523952095808 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0767545239 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.8 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2666666667 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0752161162425 0.218282227539 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0260976124693 0.0743258471296 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425068466566 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0421631125119 0.128457276422 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261232672282 0.0628817314937 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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