The author believes people's behavior is largely determined by external forces and not by their own making. It seems true in some cases but sometimes preconceived notions, past experiences and other factors force people to behave according to their own will.
People's behavior is affected by external forces can be explained by considering kinder garden students. These kids behave what is told to them by teachers or tutors in the school, A kid who is mischievous at home behave with discipline and decorum under the influence of the teacher. He or she depicts completely contradictory behavior and continues his mischief's once back home. The terrorist groups portray violent behavior because of the environment around them and various people who negatively influence them or delude them cruelty and violence. This example best explains the influence of external forces on people's behavior.
In some cases, people are so bound to their roots and are so determined about their views that no external forces or surrounding can change their views. The best example is a great leader Mahatma Gandhi, he was so only leader in his era to stick with non-violence to make India an independent nation. Numerous people criticized the path he followed and there were a lot of attempts against his views and course of action. People believed that non-violence would never lead them to independence, but he was determined on his roots and never deflected from his path in spite of a plethora of criticism. Hence, a person's determination, emotional stability, etc are important factors to examine a person's behavior.
Conclusively, 'Behavior' is a complex attribute of human life and it is impossible to exactly predict if it is largely determined by external forces or the making of their own.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...ses but sometimes preconceived notions, past experiences and other factors force people to behav...
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Line 3, column 610, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...te of a plethora of criticism. Hence, a persons determination, emotional stability, etc...
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Line 3, column 693, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... etc are important factors to examine a persons behavior. Conclusively, Behavior is a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, in some cases, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 290.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14482758621 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85604684261 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555172413793 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4837238567 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 114.769230769 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178513781279 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769177051898 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692430340061 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130415921428 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458034323735 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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