The author believes that Nature's Way, a chain of selling health food and other health-related products will be very successful in the town of Plainsville. The author provides various factors to bolster his claim but upon further
scrutinizing these factors seems unpersuasive and specious.
The author believes that Plainville residents live healthy life similar to other areas where Nature's Way is successful.
However, the author fails to provide any strong proof to buttress his claim. The author should provide a correlation
between the sale of the health products in those areas and the factors responsible for the sale and show it's similarities
with trends in Plainsville. The author also claims merchants reports regarding the high sale of running shoes and exercise
clothing but there is no proof that the sale of these products is related to people living a healthy life and not any other reason. The running shoes and exercise cloths can be used for other reasons like exporting it to other nearby cities for sale or for adopting new lifestyle amongst the youngster. To make this claim persuasive, the author should provide more details regarding the reason behind the purchase of these products.
Also, the author claims that people are living a healthy lifestyle based on crowding of health clubs, wealth training and aerobics classes in Plainsville. There is a possibility that the number of health clubs and classes are in paucity in Plainsville and which in turn resulted in overcrowding of these places. The author thus without any strong evidence has arrived at an extreme conclusion. To make his claim more believable author can provide the survey showing the number of classes and health clubs in the town and people enrolling in it.
The author also claims that because of the fitness-for-life program more school children will be interested in health-related products and will be better for the future of the store. However, it is possible that most the school children would not buy these products to complete this program and will prefer only basic exercises like walking. There is no strong evidence that these children will adopt these as a habit and will continue to exercise in the future.
Conclusively, The author's argument sounds vague and unpersuasive and to make it credible he can provide surveys and reports to support his claims.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1954 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.062 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.619 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.623 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.374 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rs to bolster his claim but upon further scrutinizing these factors seems unpersu...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ctors seems unpersuasive and specious. The author believes that Plainville residen...
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Line 7, column 133, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... healthy life and not any other reason. The running shoes and exercise cloths can b...
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Line 10, column 19, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...rcise in the future. Conclusively, The authors argument sounds vague and unpersuasive ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, regarding, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15803108808 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67603538848 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461139896373 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8925805549 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.4375 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.125 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6875 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 10.0 5.15768463074 194% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185597403975 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716605037041 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103859681117 0.0701772020484 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.082299324951 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0897398436464 0.0628817314937 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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