For years, there has been a never-ending debate on whether human’s behaviour is determined by whether exterior factors such as society, environment or people’s will and determination. From my perspective, I disagree with the saying that claims people are susceptible to being controlled by forces not of their own making.
A good example to elucidate my point of view is the marvellous story of the famous British author J.K.Rowling. For most people, she is a prolific author who gave birth to one of the most iconic pieces of British literature which has spread its name throughout the globe-Harry Potter and a strong-willed feminist who stands for equality and righteousness. However, it was not until her moving speech at Harvard that her dark past was revealed. She was a victim of family abuse and later became a single mother who lived on social welfare while being diagnosed with severe depression. As she was ready to give up her life, she found a small light of hope in her writing but the start of her career was not auspicious as many publishers rejected her novels. However, only in the depth of despair can we saw her burning passion burning even brighter than ever before. Her pen kept on writing relentlessly until the day Harry Potter was recognized and published, marking a change of direction in her career to a much brighter side. Now, she is now one of the wealthiest women in the world as well the icon of restive determination and hope in the future. If she had given up on her writing, we will surely never know the marvellous world of Harry Potter.
Life, in fact, is a long journey through which we are constantly challenged by many uncontrollable forces. From the early ages, the homosapien was one of the weakest species on Earth and had no change for survival. However, they came to terms with their disadvantages in comparison with other predators and tried to find ways to survive. As the result, the weak perished while the strong continued to live on and evolve constantly until they became us human dominating the world as it is imprinted by the law of selection. Through difficulties, we learned our weaknesses and tried to improve ourselves in order to cope with those difficulties. Blaming fate or the society is only an excuse that we say to ourselves to seek comfort from the harsh truth that we are not only weak against the world but also ourselves.
From the afore-mentioned arguments, it can be concluded that in life, we are indeed unable to change our parents, the countries we live in or other exterior factors but our attitude towards these things are free for us to control and the moment we acknowledge that, we became more positive and ready to fight until our last breath.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Rowling
... story of the famous British author J.K.Rowling. For most people, she is a prolific aut...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, while, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2272.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 472.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81355932203 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79828853078 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53813559322 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6467769314 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.222222222 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2222222222 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0875911094667 0.243740707755 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0304018850331 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443863317988 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.070525507179 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648149527977 0.0667264976115 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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