People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting

The behavior of people refers to the actions and choices made by them to achieve or reach cretain goals. Some argue that all these behavior are largely if not completely controlled by external forces but the other ones think that we have the complete control over our actions. I believe that most of our actions are controlled by external forces and merely are those actions that are made based on our own intention.

First of all, humans are definitely not free to do all what they want as there are many hindrances such as laws that we have to abide by. Indeed, our freedom is limited in all the actions that we want to make thus we can not have a complete control over what we want to achieve. For example, if someone wants to travel from a country to the other there are a lot of papers that need to be prepared and the person should ask for a visa that if not accepted, then it is impossible to travel even if that person lives on the border and he/she only has to walk to reach their wanted destination.

Secondly, all humans are born with a clear mind. That is to say, our mind was a clean white paper. A lot of our behaviors have been instilled and written in that paper through education. The question to be asked is : If we lived alone and nobody ever made us learn the normal common things, would we do what we are doing now? I do not think that our behaviour would be shaped the way it is now, a multitude of things would be different and our actions will be shaped by the results and needs. By way of illustration, kids if not taught that they should eat in a certain manner, their eating will be shaped by how much hungry they are. They are taught that they should eat slowly without making a mess but if not they will eat the way that will appease their desire. Moreover, religion can be a force that shapes our behavior as it tends to make people refrain from from a number of things that we biologically need such as some types of food and sexual relationships.

Thirdly, as stated in the beginning most actions are controlled by outside powers yet some actions, even if not controlled, are common between everyone because their outcome is harmful. We have a body that has a number of essential needs and is weak so it needs protection from all dangers. In addition, It can be clear that the majority of laws that constrain our behavior are laws that are respected because if not we will be harmed. In a car, for example, the driver needs to protect the passengers and themselves from accidents by respecting the driving code. This act is not mainly done because the driver does not have a choice or because they will be punished, even if in reality the opposite might happen, but mainly because it will be dangerous otherwise.

In conclusion, most of our acts are controlled by outside forces, whether it is humans or nature there are always laws and constraints. Thus, humans have little to no control over their actions.

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Average: 1.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this behavior' or 'these behaviors'?
Suggestion: this behavior; these behaviors
...each cretain goals. Some argue that all these behavior are largely if not completely controlle...
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Suggestion:
...completely controlled by external forces but the other ones think that we have th...
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... that need to be prepared and the person should ask for a visa that if not accept...
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...tilled and written in that paper through education. The question to be asked is :...
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... as it tends to make people refrain from from a number of things that we biologic...
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...e laws that are respected because if not we will be harmed. In a car, for example...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, thus, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.6327345309 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 28.8173652695 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2411.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 541.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45656192237 5.12650576532 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37527549161 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436229205176 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.9 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.809131559 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.80952381 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7619047619 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0524847456763 0.218282227539 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0198128802612 0.0743258471296 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0186411517753 0.0701772020484 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0335127796861 0.128457276422 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201914789647 0.0628817314937 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 12.5979740519 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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