The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author of this letter argues that a sustainable decrease in the accidents between pedestrians and mopeds of the Balmer island can be achieved by decreasing the number of mopeds rental from 50/ day to 25/day during the summertime. This conclusion was made based on data provided by several suburb islands such as Seaville. The assumptions made by the author are ambiguous and leave room to a number of questions.
The first question is how similar is Seaville to Balmer? In other words, can the outcomes that happened in the Seaville occur in Balmer if the same actions are made? The author assumes that the two islands are analogic but they might be disparate. Perhaps, the number of citizens in Balmer is more than it is in Seaville making the process of reducing the rental per day a superficial solution. Moreover, if the inhabitants are numerous then cutting the rental can cause a huge need for transportation.
The second question to be asked is: Is it correct to compare a period of about 3 months to a period of a whole year? The author used the fact that the accidents of Seaville decrease by 50 percent last year, without stating if this data was made for all type of accidents or for mopeds only, and attempts to apply them on summertime season. Possibly, that the accidents due to mopeds increased in that year but the decrease over the whole year in different aspects overshadowed it.
The third question is: Are mopeds the only reason that causes the increase in accidents during the summer months? Indeed, many other reasons might cause accidents. For example, the paths of pedestrians might be narrow or not provided at all. Thus, the interaction between cars and mopeds with pedestrians rises and it also is proportional to the number of citizens there.
In conclusion, the assumptions of the author weaken the arguments and make the conclusion erroneous. They have to answer to these main questions and provide plausible inputs so that the solution given can work.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 341 350
No. of Characters: 1612 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.297 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.727 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.596 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.707 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.501 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.058 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...ental from 50/ day to 25/day during the summertime. This conclusion was made based on data...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 322, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...eds only, and attempts to apply them on summertime season. Possibly, that the accidents du...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 211, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ts so that the solution given can work.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, then, third, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1659.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 340.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87941176471 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65764386897 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511764705882 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0293307157 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5882352941 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188733347049 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558748130208 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539639776724 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961642671113 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620280963952 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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