A person who knowing commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain and civil rights or the to benefit from his or her own labor.
Throughout the history, authorities have been engaged a great struggle to make a decision about criminal people. A controversial question regarding this issue is whether the person who knowingly commits a crime should not benefit from his or her own labor or not. Some people are inclined towards the opinion that for avoiding to make a similar crime, people who make a crime should not benefit from their labor. But I, despite the general consensus, disagree with this statement due to some reasons. In what follows, I will aptly explain my viewpoints.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that hardly can anyone deny the facts confining people who make a crime has dangerous effects on their lives. As a matter f fact, this decision leads them to be isolated from society because they are known as bad persons in the society. To contrast, if the authorities and experts provide a suitable condition for them to not only compensate their mistakes but also enhance and promote the prominent feature in themselves, they will see the world through a new lens, and accordingly, try not to repeat their mistakes. Although the government should punish them severely, after reproaching them, they should provide an opportunity for them to foster the good characteristic of themselves. This will show people that no one inherently is bad, and everyone can grow the good feature in each time. To illustrate, Bouda who wasted his life after a long time became one hero for Indian people, because he decided to flourish the good features in himself.
Another equally significant reason to be mentioned is that how authorities and leaders punish the crime person directly affect how a family behaves to children. Obviously, home is such as the small society which has more influenced by the big society. When parents can nurture their children correctly, they encourage their children to do suitable actions, and subsequently, punish them while making a mistake. Hence, children not only learn how to behave in the society but also they figure out if making mistake, they should compensate it instead of only blaming themselves. As a result, if society limits the criminal from grabbing job, it might lead them to repeat their crime.
In a nutshell, contemplating all above-mentioned one soon realizes that growing the pleasant and acceptable features and endeavoring to compensate their mistakes, both, are the main reasons why I disagree with the argument. Thereupon, I strongly suggest authorities to pay more emphasis on the consequences of their decision on the criminal person life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'consensus'.
Suggestion: consensus
...it from their labor. But I, despite the general consensus, disagree with this statement due to so...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s, I will aptly explain my viewpoints. The first exquisite point to be mentione...
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Suggestion:
...r decision on the criminal person life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, if, regarding, so, while, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2174.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12735849057 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77549350324 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551886792453 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4383256201 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.777777778 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5555555556 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179509329083 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607505544567 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113137993627 0.0758088955206 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115578675043 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115096107368 0.0667264976115 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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