The issue at hand states that a person who has knowingly committed a crime, has broken the social contract and hence, should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor. In my opinion, the topic takes too extreme a stance by completely banishing all the civil rights a citizen is entitled.Although it is of paramount importance that no acts of heinous crime should go unpunsihed, but without understanding the predicament of the perpetrator, or the duress under which a crime was made, a person should not be inculpated. This viewpoint is explicated in the ensuing paragraphs.
In 2012, in the capital of India, a girl was gangraped, and among the the four accused, one was a juvenile.The Supreme Court of India took about a year and a half to deliberate what kind of punishment should the juvenile be given. The remaining three were given death penalty, however the juvenile was given a lesser punishment. In this scenario, given the atrocity of the crime, the punishment meted out is justified;however when other scenarios of petty crimes -committed by juvenile have to be considered, they are given the benefit of doubt, as they are still young to make sound judgement for themselves. Mostly, the crimes committed by juveniles include petty robberies , pick-pocketing,passing sly remarks on women passing by and so on; in such scenarios if we totally divest them of their civil rights, aren't we commiting a crime too. They should be punished, but in approportion to the intensity of the crime.
Likewise, a person resorts to committing a crime knowingly only when he doesn't trust the judiciary anymore.There is a possibilty that beacause of inefficient jurisdiction, especially in India, where it takes almost decades for the court to complete one case, does one become a criminal. Then there are also examples of a plethora of cases where the actual criminals like the underworld Dons and mafia are exonerated, because they are intimidating and have enogh resources and money to buy the corrupt judges and lawyers.These circumstances can make a criminal of even the most scrupulous man.What should be done in these cases - improve the efficacy of the judiciary, restore the faith of the public in the system to prevent them from becoming criminals instead of denuding them of their fundamental rights, just because the circumstances forced them to take the law in their own hands.
We need to understand the intensity and impact of the so-called knowingly committed crimes. These days even littering the streets is a crime, jumping the signals is a crime,hacking someone's social media account is a crime. Are we considering all these crimes on the same level as killing a person(s) ? These former acts of flotuing rules are not at par with the latter and hence one should be able to understand the gravity of the crime, and then decide the punishment.One punishment for all crimes is not justified.
Thus according to the aformentioned paradigms, I vehemently believe that not allowing a person who has broken the social contract, retain his civil rights is too extreme, a midway approach should be taken.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, likewise, so, still, then, thus, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2628.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02485659656 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03696617629 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525812619503 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 839.7 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 135.671498685 60.3974514979 225% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 175.2 118.986275619 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.8666666667 23.4991977007 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387325854972 0.243740707755 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13614566063 0.0831039109588 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.200967782276 0.0758088955206 265% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241533213123 0.150359130593 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.183630116694 0.0667264976115 275% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 14.1392134831 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.1743820225 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 100.480337079 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.7820224719 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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