A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor.
The author orrates that a person should be allowed to have his or her civil right if they have knowingly broken the social contract. I disagree with the statement, even though the person has committed crime they are still human and they should be given their rights. Yes i agree that they should be punished but taking away their civil rights will be too extreme. I would like to elaborate my stance by giving reason in the essay further.
Firstly i would like to cite an example of a juvenile who is orphan and is left on street for surviving, they do not have sense of what is right or wrong. These kids dont even have money to feed themselves. Someday out of hunger if they go and knowingly steal food from a store and they are taken away by the police authority. Do you think taking away their civil right is correct ? No, i agree that they should be punished so that these kids realise that what they did was wrong and stealing in no way is justify-able. Instead we should send them to reforming school or juvenile jail where they are given education or are taught some skills to survive when they do outside the jails. These kids should be given chance to reform rather than taking away their rights and make them helpless for life time.
Another example would be of a person who has been suspected for a crime and it has not been proved that they have harmed anyone. So there are time when their lawyer have to take side of the person who has committed the crime and they know that they are defending a prospect criminal but they still do it since it is their job to defend the person who has hired them. You cannot take the lawyers degree just because he was doing his work of lawyering for a prospect. It is the authority of the judge to decide if the person was guilty or not
So according to me the criminal should be punished however, taking away social rights are too extreme. What if the criminal has improved or amended his deeds. Taking away his social right will make him suffer for his whole lifetime.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, so, still
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 58.6224719101 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1662.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 375.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.432 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1232517507 2.79657885939 76% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474666666667 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6160011821 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7647058824 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52941176471 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249848884736 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927921073253 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862825659111 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176341737459 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633434046331 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 12.1639044944 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 100.480337079 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.