"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
I partially agree with the issue, where the author says the best way of preparing our young generation for the field of government or private industry is via installing a sense of cooperation and not competition. I would like to discuss my stand further in the essay.
Firstly, why a competition is created? it is created to choose the best person who will be suitable to do the job successfully. India has a huge population, more than hundreds of engineering college are present in one state itself, the number of people graduating from these college are more than thousands. However the job scenario is not the same. There are limited companies and limited job so there has to be some level of competition to select the best mind and the suitable person for the role. So that every individual gets chance to showcase their skills.
Cooperation can cause inequality. Consider if there is a student who recently graduated from a college in some rustic are of the country. He does not know many people from the industry or he does not have good connections with any one in the industry, so he might lack a change to get the job. In comparison if you talk about a person who has stayed in the city and knows many multinational workers, he might get the job even if he is not qualified enough, however he may get the job just due to the cooperation he had between him and his multinational company friend.
Although cooperation is not always deleterious, it is beneficial for a person to grow. When you have entered the industry after competing with thousands of student. You would need some guidance from your seniors to perform in the industry so if the seniors and you colleagues are cooperative you grow faster in the industry.
So both cooperation and competition is necessary for the young might to progress in the government or private industry.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, so, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 324.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79938271605 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79127721147 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506172839506 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.8813957222 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1875 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6875 5.21951772744 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129335395688 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415097750474 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663823186776 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950555187393 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071499220099 0.0667264976115 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 100.480337079 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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