Starting from the Stone Age, man has been exploring different ways and means to make his life comfortable. There have been numerous technological discoveries and developments which have aided in making the world what it is today. The modern man has access to various technological gadgets which have made his life much more comfortable as compared to the life led by his forefathers. Moreover, man has become more efficient as he now has the assistance of technology to carry out his routine work. There is no doubt that the primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency, but creating more leisure time cannot be related to either the technological developments or the increased efficiency of man. The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time. Technological advancement is never mean to bring people more leisure time, but the bourgeoisie.
Prime, technology may brought some general improvement in human life, but it’s never meant for the masses. From the first flushable toilet to the serum to cure cancer, all hail to the one’s can reward the most. The structure of power in human society, the natural psyche to raid the greatest yield is always offer to the most powerful. From the tallest obese man in the tribe, to the bloodthirsty warlords and in our age, child molesting islanders, to the finest craftsman submit their bid. We, the people, often called the “proletarian” until some genius invented a more effective way to quell the unconscious, is most unlikely to be the target audience for the latest Martian inventions.
Sequential, when the proletarians have so much efficiency, the bankers and intellectuals won’t harness as much premium currency as they have today. To maintain the throne of unobstructed power, in modern capitalism world people need more purchasing token. To earn the outmost, merchants wield scarcity. Once most sacred, the clergy, the law-binder, the plutocrats, all are the professions sit on a monopoly of knowledge, and the zenith efficiency. When the printing press, the mass media and finally, fiber internet came, all those powers shattered. Are they unwanted consequences of an new evolutionary age, or the quest for leisure?
Climatically, do we want more technological advancement when we have overwhelming flesh and soul entertainment? What is always wanted, but never achieved? At the moment of truth, glory and sacrifice, I don’t think anyone continue the epic chase of more advancement. The unfilled hunger for more, consumerism and excess, are the motor wheel of human neo-anthropology age. But our brains are lowsomely primitive, chemials invented back in 1300s by the Assassins cult can already fulfill all our desire. If not vice versa, then technological advancement, for the stars and ultima, should not aim at leisure.
To put it briefly, an childish naivety juvenile investor will bet on more strategical technology enterprise entering the field of pinnacle leisure, you should find those in the cocaine field of Colombia.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: offered
...he to raid the greatest yield is always offer to the most powerful. From the tallest ...
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Suggestion: a
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Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'continues'.
Suggestion: continues
...nd sacrifice, I don't think anyone continue the epic chase of more advancement. The...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...t aim at leisure. To put it briefly, an childish naivety juvenile investor will...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...those in the cocaine field of Colombia.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, so, then, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2643.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 494.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35020242915 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12245569194 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 204.123752495 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570850202429 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 827.1 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2770424128 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.72 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.76 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.68 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330571135964 0.218282227539 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844897709036 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112755943455 0.0701772020484 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146282816539 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103320299392 0.0628817314937 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 98.500998004 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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