In the age of the internet, the social media is in the heyday. The power of social media affects not only the public but also the celebrities by the exposure, which are at high frequency in various fields all over the world. At the same time, it is controversial that whether the scandals is beneficial to improve the social environment. From various evidence, we can see, in order to make scandals contribute to ameliorate the social environment, this double-edged sword should be constrained within a certain range.
The quantity and quality of scandals is the important effect determining factor. In this information era, everyone suffers from excessive information, resulting in the insensibility of the general public. Therefore, the quantity and quality of the scandal are the key indicators of its effect. According to a survey conducted in China by HZNU, 70% of students are insensitive to the scandals of actors and actresses, which can be interpreted as the result of an excessive amount of scandals in the entertainment industry. However, nearly 90% of students expressed their concern about a recent corruption scandal, which is rare and impactful to the public. Additionally, overexposures cause mutual harm to the public and the celebrities. The public could become numb to that unverifiable news and celebrities suffer from the lack of privacy. Therefore, scandals are beneficial provided that the frequency and the reliability of scandals are above a certain level.
The effects of scandals, in terms of the benefit and damage it could cause, are distinct in different fields. In some fields, the scandals could produce positive effects, while in certain fields, the release of scandals could be a calamity. For instance, the Watergate event in which the president Nixon was accused of wiretapping his opponents results in the first resignation of a U.S. Presidents. The following investigation reveals a considerable number of dark side of the USA politic at that time, which greatly ameliorated the comprehensive political environment. The scandal in charity fields, however, could result in a series of negative, even life-risking consequence. In China, people’s negative impression of red cross association from a corruption scandal lasts for years. The scandal ruined the credit of the red cross association and people refuse to donate blood for the consideration that It would not be used to help people in need, causing national insufficiency of blood. Therefore, the effect of scandal largely depends on the particular fields.
Last but not least, the fake scandal published by journalists who want to gain reputation can hardly produce the positive effect. In other words, the reality of scandals is essential, since the fake scandal is often suspicious and without solid evidence. People of the information age are less credulous than their parents. In today's BBS, the scandal would be penetrated within few days by the commenters by various evidence found in the internet. Therefore, only the scandal of credibility or high possibility could exist and produce enough impact on the public in the current world.
To sum up, whether the scandal can be useful should be estimated from different aspect including its fields, quality and quantity, and truthfulness. The scandal or the exposure is an intrinsic part of achieving justice and fairness of human society in the age of information, on the condition that it is limited to a modest range.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2463.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 471.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22929936306 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95845683708 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498938428875 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 781.2 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 14.0 4.99550561798 280% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8016924563 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.086956522 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4782608696 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30434782609 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 5.13820224719 350% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118329193587 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0363597374069 0.0831039109588 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0339542000636 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723159934915 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023493414055 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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