Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
There are numerous ways a system can clean up its own mess: from watchdogs to whistleblowers, these self-disciplining bodies are the first line against misconducts. But are they effective enough? Wouldn’t, from time to time, there be someone or something too powerful or too damaging for disciplining institutions to deal with?
Here comes in the scandals. In most cases scandals are fantastically useful in battling the hidden darkness, as in the modern world it is the people who ultimately makes and destroys even the most powerful. Once a story is exposed to the public, no person or organization could ever suppress it again, be it in the US, the European nations, or even the “dictatorial” former USSR. Take president Nixon for example: arguably the most powerful person at the time, he was brought down by a single election misconduct. Neither his power and influence, nor that of the Democratic party, could intervene to save him. Were it not for the Watergate scandal, however, he would have been easily spared by internal investigations to serve, as they would shamelessly call, “the greater good”.
But the above beautiful account is not the whole story. From the very efficacy of scandals stems also the temptation to direct them for some entity’s own benefit. Or put more blatantly, the stories can be orchestrated or even fabricated to serve as weapons. The experience of Julian Assuage, the founder of WikiLeaks, could testify to this. To this day it is believed by a great many that his raping scandal either never happened or is a setup by the US security agencies: but this does not matter, for a scandal is all that’s needed for him to be arrested and put away. In this sense, scandals are far inferior to rational and responsible speakers or reformers, as what the story achieves could well be the wrong thing.
So, what is it that makes or unmakes the power of scandals in preserving justice? In my opinion is the will, freedom and capacity of the people’s civic participation. When and only when the people have the training, the ability, the chance and the will to come into these highly diffuse affairs and make out what the nation truly needs and then place their collective influence as “The People” to make what’s good a reality, can scandals serve as a positive tool for the society. The lack of any of the three essential ingredients, on the other hand, would allow the offender to either walk away through high pressure policies, as in many African countries with a pseudo-democracy, or find someone less important to take the blame.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, well, for example, in most cases, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2278.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 440.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17727272727 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13919174206 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.6768293595 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.894736842 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1578947368 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0827722842476 0.243740707755 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0306033109555 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0281879051761 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0577626726593 0.150359130593 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245130387165 0.0667264976115 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.