Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position
Are scandals useful in calling our attention to critical issues, as the statement argues? Of course, few would disagree that scandals can easily draw the interest of the public, sometimes even more effectively than social activists or reformers could. However, I believe that scandals are not always useful for the following reasons.
Firstly, while some scandals may benefit our society by raising critical issues, other scandals only draw the attention of the public without serving any pragmatic purpose. Given the materialistic society, covetously making money with celebrities and gossips surrounding them, the attention of the public shifts along with the different celebrity scandals everyday. It is not difficult to understand that such scandals involving contemporary celebrities, such as Jay Z, Kim Kardashian, Katy Perry, and others, do not help us solve pressing societal issues that may benefit our society. Rather, those scandals are only vain and short-lived.
Secondly, scandals often to be not only useless but actually can be deleterious since it can distract people from understanding the critical aspects of an issue. When the media found out that Byeonghun Lee, a famous Korean actor, has been cheating on his wife, his picture and articles were on the front page of all major newspapers. Because of this scandal, all other important news, which is more related to the general well-being of Korean people than the extramarital relationship of an actor, were all relegated to the next priority on the media. This shows that scandals often not only just vain but also detrimental, as they distract people from obtaining news that have more critical impact on their life.
Of course, some may still argue scandals are useful, as some of them have actually revealed important political corruption and problems. However, simply revealing issues does not always lead to the positive outcome. Often, the related issues are still remain not completely resolved. The powered milk scandal in China saved a million of babies from noxious chemical ingredients. However, even after such scandal, there still exists unethical food companies who produce inedible food products to minimize the cost of production.
While scandals can help us focus on an issue more effectively than what any speakers or reformers could, this does not necessarily mean that such scandals are always relevant to critical social matters. Often, scandals can be nothing but vain, or even distract people from focusing at more critical problems.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Need to remove duplicated content, like:
scandals often to be not only useless but actually can be deleterious since it can distract people from understanding the critical aspects of an issue.
This shows that scandals often not only just vain but also detrimental, as they distract people from obtaining news that have more critical impact on their life.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 2079 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.237 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.574 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.056 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.528 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 357, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...g with the different celebrity scandals everyday. It is not difficult to understand that...
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Line 7, column 253, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'remained'.
Suggestion: remained
...me. Often, the related issues are still remain not completely resolved. The powered mi...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'while', 'of course', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.224215246637 0.240241500013 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.132286995516 0.157235817809 84% => OK
Adjectives: 0.116591928251 0.0880659088768 132% => OK
Adverbs: 0.100896860987 0.0497285424764 203% => Less adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0313901345291 0.0444667217837 71% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107623318386 0.12292977631 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0381165919283 0.0406280797675 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.65643611934 2.79330140395 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0179372197309 0.030933414821 58% => OK
Particles: 0.00224215246637 0.0016655270985 135% => OK
Determiners: 0.0874439461883 0.0997080785238 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.02466367713 0.0249443105267 99% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0134529147982 0.0148568991511 91% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2540.0 2732.02544248 93% => OK
No of words: 397.0 452.878318584 88% => OK
Chars per words: 6.39798488665 6.0361032391 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.430730478589 0.366273622748 118% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.340050377834 0.280924506359 121% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.261964735516 0.200843997647 130% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128463476071 0.132149295362 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65643611934 2.79330140395 95% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 219.290929204 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55919395466 0.48968727796 114% => OK
Word variations: 64.5490936404 55.4138127331 116% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0555555556 23.380412469 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6744319135 59.4972553346 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.111111111 141.124799967 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0555555556 23.380412469 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.888888888889 0.674092028746 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 56.0605933389 51.4728631049 109% => OK
Elegance: 1.39830508475 1.64882698954 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282621539074 0.391690518653 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0878181000166 0.123202303941 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0658351536348 0.077325440228 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.525613695981 0.547984918172 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.118339889416 0.149214159877 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106016948443 0.161403998019 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491939478321 0.0892212321368 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.250437497744 0.385218514788 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0960423106355 0.0692045440612 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179942319158 0.275328986314 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509847509905 0.0653680567796 78% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.4325221239 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 5.30420353982 302% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88274336283 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 1.0 7.22455752212 14% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 15.0 3.66592920354 409% => Less negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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