School should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
School education plays a vital role in shaping a child's future. Education is much more than what a prescribed textbooks can show to a child. According to ancient Indian education system, which is widely considered as one of the best, education can be classified into two parts, one the stem of a tree and the other its roots. While the stem symbolises the knowledge one requires for the survival in the society, the root is the real non-academic moral education that shapes the charachter of students.
Merely having subjective and academic knowledge has never shaped a successful person. If we take the case of the most successful and influencial people like Oprah Winfrey, we can infer that her academic education never did help her thrive through the difficult periods of her life. Even in the case of Elon Musk, when he was fired from his own company, only his sheer determination and will power helped him snap out of such a situation and build the empire he owns today. These relevant, real life examples symbolise the importance of non academic aspects of adulthood. So I strongly support the statement that schools should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
Life can be filled with hurdles of all kinds, academic education cannot alone show a pathway on how to deal with such situations. A student who is not trained with these non-academic aspects of adulthood might find it difficult to handle this. Without tackling these hurdles, I believe no one can reach the pinnicle of their careers. Be it a simple situation of choosing between two jobs, one that pays more, and another one that has better working conditions. To make an ideal choice among the two, academic education wouldn't be sufficient.
Schools should take the wholesome development of a student into consideration. I believe with strong conviction that an equal priority should be given to both acadamic and non-academic education. As in the case of America we can see an increasing rate of mental health issues prevailing different of the country. One very important way to better this scenario is to encourage schools to focus on the moral aspects of life.
Since schools are the primary factors that mould a child's future, a very strong emphasis should be on the non-academic aspects of adulthood. For a country with happy citizens who live in harmony, both academic and value education is a must. A perfect balance between them two types of education will serve as the base for a healthy and prosperation nation .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 426.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95774647887 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73559156595 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546948356808 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8635214752 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.571428571 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.619047619048 5.21951772744 12% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369848279487 0.243740707755 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120163206929 0.0831039109588 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166945213432 0.0758088955206 220% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206680187216 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0863342329254 0.0667264976115 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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