Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
In my opinion, it is absolutely the wrong idea for parents to allow their children to have
smart phones. They are immensely distracting, expensive, and unhealthy.
Cell phones have the power to distract young students from school work. Rather than
paying attention in class, students try to sneak opportunities to play on their phones.
Instead of thinking about schoolwork, they obsessively text each other and try to check
sites like Facebook. This takes time away from valuable studying. This is a problem both
during school and afterwards, when youngsters should be working on their homework.
At the same time, smart phones can be extremely costly. Many plans require parents to
pay abusively high monthly rates. At times, these rates can climb even higher if children
use too much data due to things like downloading songs on the Internet. Rather than
wasting money on a phone, parents should use the funds on better causes, like tutors for
their children, or a home computer on which supervised learning can take place.
Finally, smart phones can be dangerous for young children. We are still unsure medically
what the long term effects of exposure to cell phones are, particularly on vulnerable
groups such as children. It would be better to be safe than sorry. The less exposure
children have to potential toxins, the better. At the same time, kids are sometimes
targeted on social media sites by dangerous strangers. If parents allow young children to
have smart phones, it might be difficult to protect them in the long term from these kinds
of threats.
While older children may sometimes need them to stay in touch with their parents due to
their many obligations outside of the house after school, there is little cause for younger
children to own them. Parents should encourage their children to read and think in their
spare time, developing their minds. Smartphones are unhelpful when it comes to this
goal.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'maturity'.
Suggestion: maturity
...nes away from children until they reach a maturity to identify what is good for them and w...
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Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'brains'' or 'brain's'?
Suggestion: brains'; brain's
...t. The younger the mind, the better the brains capability to learn new things. A smart...
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Line 5, column 277, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ell without its harmful side effects. I dont think there is a need for constant digi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, well, at least, as well as, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1913.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93041237113 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69582577667 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533505154639 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0104581645 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1739130435 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8695652174 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.60869565217 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267345341097 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759068816062 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537914940301 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162429340124 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654425654858 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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