Essay topics: The city council of Town X has proposed reducing the city’s electric expenses by switching all the lights in public buildings from incandescent bulbs to light-emitting diodes (LEDs). The switch would be made gradually as the old incandescent bulbs burn out, and the city council reasons that since LED lights burn brighter and cost no more to purchase, the switch would help Town X save money on electrical costs in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to help evaluate the efficacy of the city council’s proposal to save money on electrical costs. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the council’s prediction.
The city council's proposed methodology to replace incandescent bulbs with LEDs is supported only by two reasons. However the proposal misses out one very substancial evidence. Nowhere in the argument does it say that LEDs consume lesser energy than the incandescent bulbs. Even though it states that LED lights burn brighter and cost no more to purchase than the latter, it does not sufficiently support the council's proposal to save money on electrical costs.
The prediction as mentioned by the city council demands for more clarity on certain issues. It addresses that the LED light burns brighter but it fails to mention the size of the area it can cover with that brightness. This significantly weakens the prediction. If a survey on whether the LED bulbs serve the same area as that of the incandescent bulbs should have proved more logical and useful.
Another question that could be raised against the prediction is the reliability of the product, nowhere in the proposal does it say that the LED bulbs are more reliable than the incandescent bulbs or even if it lasts longer. An experiment should have been done to address the reliability of the product before concluding that LED bulbs are more cost saving than the latter. This question of its durability also certainly weakens the prediction. If the LED bulbs are to be replaced more often than the incandescent bulbs, then the proposal will serve absolutely no purpose in reality.
The availability and transport costs of the LED bulbs has also an important role to play in deciding the electrical costs of Town X. If the availability of the LED bulbs are lesser and each time it requires a certain higher amount of money to transport it from the manufacture, this can significantly increase the electric charges. One possible solution to address this issue was to take a census of the shops that has a sufficient stock of LED bulbs and whether that would be enough to meet the demand.
Altogether the efficacy of the city council's proposal to save money on electrical costs seem to have missed to address some vital points. Only if the above mentioned points that inlcude the reliability, availability and current consumption can be addressed, we can conclude that there will be sufficient enough evidence to prove that the electrical costs will be reduced and significant amount of money be saved.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1943 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.894 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.705 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.201 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.594 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... LEDs is supported only by two reasons. However the proposal misses out one very substa...
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Line 1, column 409, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'councils'' or 'council's'?
Suggestion: councils'; council's
...r, it does not sufficiently support the councils proposal to save money on electrical co...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'councils'' or 'council's'?
Suggestion: councils'; council's
... Altogether the efficacy of the city councils proposal to save money on electrical co...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 397.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99244332494 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75245139482 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463476070529 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1797715117 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.588235294 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3529411765 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.29411764706 5.70786347227 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254421454076 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867962925919 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523843012565 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15081045488 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324659196908 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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