Extracurricular activites are the important part of school curiculum which helps student grow in areas other than studies. Cutting funds for these activities to repair the school buildings does not seem to be a proper solution for the problem.They should find some other way to get fundings for the repairment of the school as cutting the funds for extracurricular activities seems to be a temporary solution but can lead to the permanent loss of school's reputation.
School should find some other sources of funding.There are many charity groups which funds schools to provide high quality education to the kids of those parents who can not afford paying high fees.For example Sarswati vidya mandir school in India is being run by charitu institutions only. This school have very less fee and is able to survive only because of their academic and sports achievments. So to get more funds schools should focus to improve their academic and sports performance so that they can get more funds.But stopping extracurricular activites will reduce their sports achievements which can result in less funding from the charity institutions and the shortage of funding will remain.
Excellent Extracurricular activities infrastructure attract more students to take admission in the school.For example Delhi public school in India is famous because of the extracurricular activites infrastructure they provide, thousands of students apply for this school every year even when this school fees is one of the highest in India.Cutting funds for these activites can lead to poor infrastruture which will degrade the school's reputation and which can lead to less admits in the next academic year which will directly impact the revenue of school in a neagtive way and the problem for shortage fund will remain.
Cutting funds for Extracurricular activites can result in dropping off the existing students who want to make their career in the field of one of these activities.Cutting funds of extracurricular will lead to poor infrastructure which will directly impact the morale of studetns who want to do these activites on the regular basis. For example if a student want to make his/her career in football and the school is unable to provide the football or a football coach then the student might think of going to some other school which can provide better football facilities. This scenarios can make the things worse for the school as they will loose students as well as the money they were getting by their fees and shortage funds will continue.
In a worst case scenario where immediate funds are required one can say that cuttin funds of extracurricular is a feasible solution but we should not forget that this can impact the reputation of the school very badly and can lead to less admits as well as dropping out of existing students which can reduce the school revenue. So schools should look for other ideas like getting funds from charity groups or winning some academic or sports event which can help bring sponsors for school.These things can help the school to have a permanent solution.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, well, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 396.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14393939394 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89182369194 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44696969697 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 615.6 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 44.0 23.0359550562 191% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.66041268 60.3974514979 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 226.333333333 118.986275619 190% => OK
Words per sentence: 44.0 23.4991977007 187% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413325094809 0.243740707755 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.206269488813 0.0831039109588 248% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0975994803908 0.0758088955206 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302089435163 0.150359130593 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068639241549 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.8 14.1392134831 175% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.82 48.8420337079 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.5 12.1743820225 168% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.42 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.6 11.2143820225 175% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.7820224719 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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