Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports
and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair.
Schools are for learning and teaching. The prompt states that schools should cut funding on extracurricular activities for repair of school building needing funds. I strongly agree with this suggestion for two reasons.
To start, schools, which primarily are instituted for learning and studies, should channel funds available to it for development of her primary objectives. The event of schools laxing on her basic facilities for a support of secondary ones is sheer neglect and misplacement of priority. An aphorism says, “ when the purpose of a thing is not known, abuse is inevitable”. School buildings are important facilities for smooth operation of learning and instruction. Of what use is the extracurricular activities when buildings are gradually becoming dilapidated and without proper attention?
Furthermore, there is a level of danger associated with having buildings in bad shape. Imagine a roof dropping down during a class period. Chance has it that students may get injured and the effect could be even more catastrophic as there would definitely be panic among the students—leading to huge pandemonium and disorder. Such situation is not only unacceptable but it gies on to paint the management as incompetent and ineffective. At the background of the mind of every parent and guardian is a question of safety of their wards at school, as such, when it is even discovered, not to even consider the extreme case of accident, that out-of-shape buildings are left unattended, perhaps as reported by their wards, they may consider removing their wards form such school. Thus, the reputation of such school will be hampered badly by the bad decision of not attending to renovation needs of the school.
Of course, some may argue that extracurricular activities are helpful in building, perhaps, well-rounded students—being prepared for a more realistic future which is largely unacademic, however, primarily, schools are first for learning and studies, other “things” are secondary. Come to think of it, parents wanting football coaching for their kids would prefer to enroll them in football academy and rather not in a teaching school. Chools should not try to assume the roll of other social entities in the society and deliver on their primary responsibility. Largely, any school that lax on catering for her renovation of buildings do this at their own peril.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, may, second, so, thus, well, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2049.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 379.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40633245383 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19978696181 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5672823219 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.6623055935 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.833333333 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0555555556 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445272772673 0.243740707755 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134756441978 0.0831039109588 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14391627014 0.0758088955206 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2995647176 0.150359130593 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135886826199 0.0667264976115 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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