Schools should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation
and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and sup porting your position, be sure
to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Schools are known to shape the young minds of children , who as a consequence are the future generation and they in turn will shape the nation.Although the curriculum can never be perfect as there are many subjects both academic and non-academic, in order to have a efficacious curriculum, the schools must include a balance of both academic and non-academic courses.
It is a verifiable pattern that the students are becoming competetive, their goals rising higher and higher whenever academics is concerned, on the other hand you can easily descry a rising amount of obesity,anxiety and insecurity among the students.The reason is simple with increasing academic pressure and rising competition, students are forced to abandon their daily care of physical and mental health in order to establish themselves academically, which in the norm is more emphasized.
Academics is utmost important for any parent, a fixed curriculum do not suffice the students avarice for knowledge hence a demand is always there for new courses to be attached to the curriculum.As with given rise of population the students must keep on adding new skills to their skillset and schools are assigned this task by the parents.Thus students are forced to leave their creativity home and join the other students in a rote competition, with the example of increasing universities and engineering passouts in India, that not only increases unemployment but also decreases the demand of the profession.
Teachers and parents are well aware of this new trend, but their hands are tied too.Everyday new discoveries are made around the globe as a consequence new curriculum is created in certain intervals of the timespan, which is causing a dilemma: How much should we teach the students? If this dilemma never existed the students would be learning how to create a fire with sticks and stones despite the extant of matchsticks.This perennial knowledge flow requries the schools to compromise the physical and non academic activities, in order to educate the students and evolve along with the world.
With this nuanced essay I conclude that the importance for non academic activies must be shown to the students, who are being beguiled that academics is the only part of life where they need to focus.Schools on the other hand must also maintian that students do not loose their way in leisure and lethargy, which will hamper their skills and minds.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, thus, well, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 393.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18575063613 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96816315716 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519083969466 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.2370786517 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 65.0 23.0359550562 282% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.194887023 60.3974514979 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 339.666666667 118.986275619 285% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 65.5 23.4991977007 279% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 5.21951772744 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222141918944 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108788794883 0.0831039109588 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0335142664576 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120711820408 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024131947367 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.8 14.1392134831 253% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 5.5 48.8420337079 11% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.92365168539 201% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.6 12.1743820225 235% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.71 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.88 8.38706741573 130% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.5 11.8971910112 273% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 28.0 11.2143820225 250% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.7820224719 246% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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