The Bar Chart Below Shows The Numbers Of Men And Women Attending Various Evening Courses At An Adult Education Centre In The Year 2009 The Pie Chart Gives Information About The Ages Of These Course Participants

Essay topics:

The Bar Chart Below Shows The Numbers Of Men And Women Attending Various Evening Courses At An Adult Education Centre In The Year 2009 The Pie Chart Gives Information About The Ages Of These Course Participants

The bar graph illustrates an array of activities, teenagers in Chester indulged themselves in hours per week.
Moreover, the data provided ranges from the year 2002 to 2007.

Homework and sports have seen a sharp decline in terms of hours spent by teenagers, over the span of five years. Furthermore, hours spent on television have increased tremendously, peaking more than 35 hours a week in the year of 2007.

Similarly, teenagers spending their time to go pubs and disco parties have increased. Although, from 2002 to 2004 the hours spent every week in this particular activity were almost identical, it skyrocketed in 2007 to more than 15 hours every week.

Teenagers utilizing their weekly hours in watching DVDs was maximum in the year 2004. Afterwards, it fell even lower than 10 hours a week. Moreover, Bowling hours were highest in the year 2002, and despite it's fluctuations over the years, it fell to rock bottom in 2007 comprising of approximately 2 hours a week. Which was the least amount of hours spent by teenagers in the whole graph.

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Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 271, Rule ID: COMPRISING_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprising' or 'consisting of'?
Suggestion: comprising; consisting of
...e years, it fell to rock bottom in 2007 comprising of approximately 2 hours a week. Which was...
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Line 8, column 315, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rising of approximately 2 hours a week. Which was the least amount of hours spent by ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, moreover, similarly

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 883.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9606741573 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69885792732 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573033707865 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4266834374 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.23603664747 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0344944244682 0.215688989381 16% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0190834945043 0.103423049105 18% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0177179553287 0.0843802449381 21% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.026526966951 0.15604864568 17% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0180485025088 0.0819641961636 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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