King Primary School’s recent fundraising event.
The given pie chart provides a general view of the fundraising event, during which the major contribution came from the students of 1st grade and the least contribution to the total amount raised came from the students of 3rd grade.
Although the students of 1st grade have the upper hand in this fundraising event they are followed up by student of 2nd grade, with a difference of less than 3% of the total fund raised.They are subsequently followed by 5th,6th,4th and lastly 3rd grade students.
Among the many events organized by the students, dancing bagged the audience's attention and also their wallets! The book sale was not as fruitful as the other events were, a plausible reason could be that the demographic of the locality near King Primary school may not be interested in books for may even not have the time to spend on them, whereas events such as dancing events are known to be less time consuming to mere few hours at max, which also does not test the patience of the audience unlike books which require attention,effort and time.
Students of 4th grade and 5th grade decided to sell products such as art and cookies respectively.It appears that students who sold cookies were more successful in their endeavor than those selling paintings or drawings.Despite both grades raising a good amount , it is important to note that cookies seemed to be trending than art was which could infer that either students of 5th grade made excellent cookies that gathered more attention or it is also probable that the demographic prefer something edible like cookies, rather than something abstract such as art.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...f less than 3% of the total fund raised.They are subsequently followed by 5th,6th,4t...
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...zed by the students, dancing bagged the audiences attention and also their wallets! The b...
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...nce unlike books which require attention,effort and time. Students of 4th grade and 5t...
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...ts such as art and cookies respectively.It appears that students who sold cookies ...
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...han those selling paintings or drawings.Despite both grades raising a good amount , it ...
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...espite both grades raising a good amount , it is important to note that cookies se...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, lastly, may, so, whereas, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1344.0 965.302439024 139% => OK
No of words: 273.0 196.424390244 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92307692308 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69648512343 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 106.607317073 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 283.868780488 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 68.0 22.4926829268 302% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 155.465430241 43.030603864 361% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 336.0 112.824112599 298% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 68.25 22.9334400587 298% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.0 5.23603664747 229% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138354528593 0.215688989381 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803484982173 0.103423049105 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635199330713 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0803484982173 0.15604864568 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635199330713 0.0819641961636 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.9 13.2329268293 271% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 10.92 61.2550243902 18% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.6 10.3012195122 278% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.44 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.06136585366 127% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 40.7170731707 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 29.2 10.9970731707 266% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.0658536585 262% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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