Academic Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The charts below show each grade level s activity and the total revenue gained from it by percentage from King Primary School s recent fundraising event Summarize the information by se

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Academic Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

The table for the fundraiser event shows the activities held in it, which are associated by a grade from 1 to 6. The graph with it signifies the percentage revenue earned by an individual activity and is colour graded as per the grades shown alongside it.

From the graph, it can clearly be inferred that the dance contest accounts for the highest revenue generated by any individual event in the fundraiser. Also, book sales collected the least amount of money in the entire event.

As shown in the graph, three contests held in the fundraiser i.e. dance contest, cake decorating contest and soccer skill contest accounts for more than sixty percent of the entire revenue generated in the fundraiser.

While that is a significant percentage, different types of sales such as book sale, art sale and cookie sale barely accounts for the remaining forty percent of the sales, with book sales not even making ten percent of the total amount collected in the entire event.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 813.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92727272727 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50878346821 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569696969697 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.9687423669 43.030603864 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.5 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 22.9334400587 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.23603664747 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126354746028 0.215688989381 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811403024696 0.103423049105 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654155729312 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850196755716 0.15604864568 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720829864801 0.0819641961636 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.2329268293 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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