Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and suppor

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Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

Usually, in most countries, military is given the most priority in terms of investment and budgets in order to strengthen the protect and defend the very representation of the country. But in order to defend this very being, existence of this very being for the country is necessary, which can mostly be done by various art forms that represent the country.

Art investment, in general, would encourage many forms of art including folk art, ancient art and classical art. These forms of art would make people aware of various cultures present in our societies. Also, these form of art would be best way to depict the country's past culture and how it has changed over the period of centuries. This form of depiction would also encourage people to take a notice of these forms of art as a way to learn and understand the culture, rather than using our usual gadgets to get any information at fingertips, of which we are very accustomed to.

Investment in art also encourages many other representations such as dance, sculptures, architectural feats and many other. Through this investment, may people would be able to invest. their time in their beloved culture or passion rather than just working in a moribund field that they do not want to. Not only that, investment in art by government endorses many talents that have been either been held up by the budget cuts in the past or have stopped investing their time and passion for art they previously possessed. This, in general, would be appreciated by the above audience, who would now encourage this promotion in turn.

Also, investment and encouragement of art would turn out. to be a huge investment in terms of revenue for the government. Italy is the prime example of it. From swooping streets filled with renaissance culture of Florence to submerged streets filled with sense of passion, vigour and art, everyone who is keen to travel wants to visit Italy.

In short, I am an advert advocate of investing in arts than in military. Not only it would not only encourage an almost mordant culture to rise up that military tries to protect, but it would also turn out to ve a good investment for the government, both in terms of talent and revenue.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, may, so, then, in general, in short, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83202099738 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67469650972 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511811023622 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2451899171 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.294117647 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4117647059 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.23529411765 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130024728429 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477470318801 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0308909449752 0.0758088955206 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0771924093276 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0136297568529 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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